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Oneshot Ravenous by enembee - M

Discussion in 'Dark Arts' started by enembee, Jan 2, 2010.

3.5306122303009/5, 49 votes
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  1. Vir

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    Jan 3, 2010 #21

    This. Crack-fics suck.
     
  2. Oz

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    Jan 3, 2010 #22
    [/people taking this way too seriously]
     
  3. enembee

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    Jan 3, 2010 #23
    Oh dear, it's magic. I could entirely explain the mechanics if I was bothered, but I'm not because it's a oneshot that I wrote in two and a half hours.

    Enjoy it for what it is.
     
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  4. Lord Ravenclaw

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    Jan 3, 2010 #24
    I found it pretty amusing if not a bit rushed and silly. I liked the bit at the end with Voldemort and Hagrid, brought a chuckle. Nice job. 4/5
     
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    Jan 4, 2010 #25
    QFT.

    I'd like to read a bit more about the futile attempts of mankind at beating the swarm with everything they've got...
     
  6. Richard

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    Jan 7, 2010 #26
    I agree with Ravenclaw. It was amusing at that part.
     
  7. Kensington

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    Jan 7, 2010 #27
    It's a cute oneshot.

    Yeah, the whole Harry turning into a hungry hungry hippo due to the Basilisk venom didn't really make sense to me. But it made for an amusing read. At this point I should note that this story was well written grammatically and in regards to spelling.

    To me, the highlights were Snape quoting Muldoon, and the reconciliation of Voldemort and Hagrid. However, those two amusing scenes don't really interest me beyond a read through.

    3/5
     
  8. Zombie

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    Jan 8, 2010 #28
    When I read the title I was picturing Cannibal!Harry.

    Sir, I am dissapoint. That said, good story.
     
  9. Schrodinger

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    Jan 8, 2010 #29
    ... Zombie, is your definition of Cannibal "Human who eats humans"? Because that is exactly what Harry does
     
  10. Zombie

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    yeah, but not this kind of Cannibal Harry. This is zerg cannibal, not ritualistic cannibal.
     
  11. Jeram

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    Jan 10, 2010 #31
    Funny. It's just a nutty story.

    I kinda like it, for all its craziness.

    3.5/5
     
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    Jan 15, 2010 #32
    Liked it, and the Snape kill off reminded me of Jurassic Park as well. 4/5
     
  13. Gulliver

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    Jan 19, 2010 #33
    4/5. It's meant to be a bit of fun, and succeeds well in that endeavor.
     
  14. Johnny Farrar

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    Jan 23, 2010 #34
    I don't honestly know what to rate this story. It was kind of funny, especially the part about Tom and Hagrid. But overall, it felt as if it was moving too fast.
     
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    Jan 31, 2010 #35
    Ummm... why is this in the Recycling Bin? It is listed as 4 stars after all, and I personally think that it is pretty good.

    Having read and compared this to Ruskbyte's Quo Vadis?, I noted that that one got about as much criticism as this one, maybe even more, and there were a couple (including me) who said this one was better. Yet, with four stars as well, that is in the Library, while this is in the Recycling Bin.

    Personally, I rather like this whole concept. The explanation of how Harry becomes what he is is not fully there, but it is more developed that Quo Vadis? and also is a far more interesting (and creepy) read. Overall, I would concur with the 4/5, and ask that this be shifted into the Library, or the For Review section.
     
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    Jan 31, 2010 #36
    You realize that people adding votes changes the rating right?
     
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    Jan 31, 2010 #37
    Well, yeah. obviously. I was just surprised it was low enough to get in here in the first place...
     
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    Feb 25, 2010 #38
    Dug it. Once again you're taking the anti-cliche to a whole new level. The Hagrid/Riddle thing was great. For a ridiculous concept, it was refreshingly enjoyable...kinda like spandex. 4/5
     
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