The whole thing is brilliant. Definitely worth a read. Characterisation; plot; writers skill, all good or perfect.

It's been said above but I'll say it myself; this is a very good take on post HBP. Both realistic and appealing to someone who prefers a Darker Harry.

5/5 without a doubt.

 

wonderful story 5/5 in my book. Not really a fan of oneshots but this is one i loved

 

I love this, because one of the possible outcomes is that the ministry just decides to ignore him completely. The people who aren't completely devoted to him are probably a vast minority. And they will be accused of being Death Eaters or sympathizers. Harry could go on doing whatever the hell he wanted (within reason. No becoming a Dark Lord) and they would decide that it isn't worth another civil war.

4.5/5

 

Excellent read! For the first time in my life all those azkaban!harry fics don't seem all that far fetched. Kudos!

 

First of all, thanks for the great reviews. I am so happy you liked it... and I hope you'll like the edited version better.

See, Dark Syaoran and Vash pointed out the second part was--off, to quote their exact words. So I saved two hours and a half this weekend to edit it. By 'editing it', I mean 'almost completely rewriting it'. I hope it's fine now... and if you liked the old version better, well, I saved it too. But that's only in the unlikely case you liked it so much you absolutely want me to send it to you . As far as I'm concerned, I like the new one better, so that's the one that'll stay on FFN.

So yeah... Here's the edited version (for those who don't want to go back to the beginning of the thread to find the link!)

Thanks!

Oh, and by the way... this was meant to be a One-Shot, since I'm already struggling through four stories at the same time and I really don't need to worry about a fifth. But... if I happen to have any ideas... maybe I could write a sequel.

Maybe.

 

Good job on this story.

It was great, the best one-shot I have ever read because it gave me a sense of fullfillment when I completed this story, something which most other one-shots usually do not.

I loved Harry's characterization, you got it down perfectly and the First Person writing style was a nice touch.

Nice to see Voldemort being defeated by a way that actually makes sense according to Book Five canon (Harry banished Voldemort from his mind by thoughts of... love). Here instead of love you used pure happiness. Interesting.

Killing the Minister was written nicely, because you gave valid reasons for why Harry would kill Rufus.

Ginny... meh, her character annoys me.

The trial scene at the end was good, where half the people cheered when Harry got his wand. Nice escape plot, I think you should continue it where the order and ministry try to find Harry. Harry's smyphythisers can help him some time. I see great possibilites for a novel length sequel like make a wish, or nonjon's Where in the world is Harry Potter. Except maybe with a more serious tone.

Whatever you want to do with this, (leave it as it is or write sequel), you should know that you are my favorite author so far, and this is my favorite one-shot ever.

 

That was quite good , Id really like to see a sequel for it if you ever have the time.

 

Another great story from my favorite author 5/5

 

Well this is quite brilliant. I'm surprised I didn't see this before - must have missed it. Nice characterisation of Harry, and the ending made me very happy. 5/5

 

Wow, I really don't have much to say about this but 5/5

 

I loved this! And your Ginny was wonderfully self-deluded. Well-written and expressive. I've added it to my favorites on FFN.

 

This is a great one-shot. The first part is simply wonderful. The battle and the duel between Harry and Voldemort are original, well written and fairly realistic.

But I didn't like three things.

The way it was handled Ginny's death seemed a little unrealistic. Her behavour was too much 'parodistic' in my opinion. Of course, she had to die because she represented the 'ties' with the type of life that Harry didn't want anymore, but I think it was a bit... exaggerated.

Then I didn't like the 'hints' that maybe all Harry's reactions weren't... well, Harry's (I'm referring to Voldemort). I would have preferred if there was no doubt. I mean... considering the circumstances and his past, I think his actions were believable already.

Finally, I would have liked if Harry had immediately 'reached the open space'. Given his desire and determination (and the fact that he had already killed a person... and the Minister no less), he should have left the castle, he shouldn't have to wait. I picture him laying back on the lawn, with a blissful expression on his face and oblivious to all but the sky, while the aurors cautiosly approach him. Watching the sun, even if a symbolic act, was important.

Well, these are just tiny and personal things. The one-shot remains a little masterpiece.

 

Hmm... not sure if Tinny's heard the good news but in case you haven't... congrats! Your very own troll. Maybe even someone on these boards from the sound of the beginning and ending "author's" notes.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4201056/1/

I think it's a few hundred words longer. Anyone spot the differences?

 

I looked. It is a copy. Very minor changes. She ripped Tinn off.

I reported it to FF admin.

I suggest a DLP smack down.

The review I left:

If her bio is to be believed, she is 15.

 

Her favorite stories reflect everything DLP hates. Can't wait to see what Tinn does to the retarded little bitch.

 

She's obviously the more talented author, I think Tinn should give all her stories over to Illuminatia.

 

pink_ladies3@hotmail.co.uk Well, that's her e-mail. I think i'm going to start signing her up for spam. Oh, on the original post. Great story.

 

I like Veritas's idea, so I think I'm going to help with that little project. You doin' porn, credit cards, or so called "rewards"?

 

I've been a lurking Tinn fanboy for some time, in a way that's not at all strange or creepy to think about. Let me just say, ftw that not only do you write more coherently and quite frankly, just plain better, than 99% of native speakers, but you manage to pack more wit and general degradation into a flame than I'd have thought possible. Brilliant.

Tinn, ftw.


I assume that reviews disappear along with the story when it's deleted, so for posterity

Tinn Tam's response:

Dear Illuminatia,

First and foremost, I would like to congratulate you. Your education in the wonders of computer sciences is going well: you learned how to copy and paste. Who knows, maybe you were even so bold as to use the shortcuts! A fond tear slides down my cheek as I picture you, trembling fingers reaching towards the keyboard, your brain struggling to recognize the right keys — there, it just found Ctrl, C and V! Sweat is rolling down in beads on your forehead and your head is pounding from the intellectual effort; but you know this isn’t finished. The hardest part is still to come.

Long, painful minutes later, the index of your left hand manages to press on the Ctrl key; then comes the inhuman task of having to press on another key… while keeping the Ctrl one down! Impossible! Yet you succeeded! You nearly died from the effort, but you did it! You, my friend, are the Neanderthals’ hero!

It’s good, too, that you didn’t let the extreme complexity of the FFN submitting system deter you from your task. I mean, when you saw that you were required to READ the guidelines, yes, READ actual *words*, and so many of them too — you must have died a little inside. That was brave, girl, that was brave.

Speaking of the submitting conditions, I find it cute that you didn’t even bother to change the title and summary. Could be two things; either it shows you’re a lazy, enormous ** whose fingers are too fat to press individual keys without using a stick, thus severely hampering your ability to type in any language; or it’s the sign of another virtue of yours: you’re lucid enough to realize that your two exhausted neurons would not have come up with anything coherent. Chances are they would have committed suicide rather than try to achieve such an insurmountable task.

Oh, sorry for the five-syllable words — I hope it didn’t do any damage to… Oh dear God, I’m so sorry. My condolences to your left brain cell. It must be feeling really lonely, now, all alone in the watery void of your skull.

Continue your exploration of the keyboard, honey. Who knows, maybe one day you’ll even manage to write your own author’s note in something vaguely resembling English! … Well one can only hope, at least.

On an unrelated note, don’t start hyperventilating because you got asked a valid question about the one-shot (your first review, in case you’re struggling to understand what I mean). I replied to them myself. And last, I hope to God you didn’t change a single word of my fic, you worthless little **-filled **. Now that would make me **.