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Complete Remedial Jedi Theology

Discussion in 'Star Wars' started by Inert, Jan 20, 2021.

  1. Inert

    Inert Death Eater

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    Title: Remedial Jedi Theology
    Author: MarbleGlove
    Rating: Teen and Up
    Genre: General
    Status: Complete
    Chapters/Words: 7/51k
    Pairings: Anakin Skywalker/Padme Amidala (background)
    Summary: Let us consider the fact that the Jedi Order is a monastic religious organization based out of a temple, with five basic tenets of faith.

    Ch 1: Death, yet the Force (meeting Anakin)
    Ch 2: Chaos, yet Harmony (teaching Anakin)
    Ch 3: Passion, yet Serenity (teaching a teenaged Anakin, good grief)
    Ch 4: Ignorance, yet Knowledge (Anakin is a Knight now, why is he still Obi-Wan’s problem?)
    Ch 5: Heresy, yet Orthodoxy (actual plot? Ie, Clones and Sith)
    Ch 6: Emotion, yet Peace (epilog)

    Ch 7: extras / deleted scenes

    Link: https://archiveofourown.org/works/15118700/chapters/35054840

    Rating : 4/5

    General Star Wars fic that centers on Obi-Wan as he struggles to adapt to teaching Anakin. No real action to speak of, more an introspective look at an alternate way Obi-Wan could've been a Jedi Master. It loosely follows the canon plot with some small adjustments based on how Obi-Wan handles things differently.

    The writing is good, the introspection kept me interested, and Obi-Wan is a wryly enjoyable narrator. Anakin comes across as a bit of a teenage idiot, but then he is one. Mostly I enjoy this fic because it's the first fic I've found on the archive that doesn't either A) bash the fuck outta the Jedi (attachment, 'Master', etc.), or B) turn everything into a fluff fest.
     
  2. MonkeyEpoxy

    MonkeyEpoxy Totally Sirius DLP Supporter

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    Is this a canon-compliant fic (ie. it eventually leads up to Windu and Sidious facing off while Anakin runs up as the shatterpoint of all shatterpoints) or are we looking at an AU?

    I am going to say, that just reading the intro to the first chapter, it is compelling.

    This quote,

    is so fundamentally jedi order that it's beautiful. so fundamentally of the living force that it's perfect.
     
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  3. Iztiak

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    It is not canon-compliant, it is definitely an AU.

    I will say this is certainly not a perfect story. I will say that it probably would have been an improvement for the story to be written exactly like this except canon-compliant.

    Also the final chapters seem a rushed to me, though that makes sense since the author was focusing on the philosophy rather than the plot.

    But I like it anyway. It hits most of the right notes for what I enjoy, and the writing quality is high.

    If I was a bit more objective I’d give this a 4/5, but because I’m pretty happy about reading an Obi-Wan centric story that I like I’ll give it a 5/5.
     
  4. MonkeyEpoxy

    MonkeyEpoxy Totally Sirius DLP Supporter

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    I love this story. This shit is hilarious

     
  5. Inert

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    The final chapter and a half are a bit rushed to me as well. Obi-wan's solution to the Clone Wars is also a bit too tongue-in-cheek for me, but I don't hate it.
     
  6. Ched

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    4/5

    I enjoyed this and at 50k it's about the right length for what it is. The solution to the Clone Wars was too easy to be satisfying and made it feel as if Palpatine was not actually all that dangerous/skilled in terms of politics, intrigue, or combat. But apart from that I was along for the whole ride.

    I can't pinpoint what keeps it from a higher rating but I do know that I can't go higher. I think it's worth the library though.
     
  7. Jack-O

    Jack-O Second Year

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    Oh hey, a well written Obi-Wan centric fic!

    I liked it enough to read it all in one go (that doesn't happen too often these days), but I do agree that the ending falls flat compared to the rest of it. Sheev going down with barely any fight was honestly pretty disappointing.

    All in all it's a pretty solid fic, so 4/5 from me.
     
  8. MonkeyEpoxy

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    100% agreed. The way the Obi-Wan circumvented the Clone Wars and Darth Sidious was cute, and fit the tone of the fic, but it's still very weak. It's well-written enough and entertaining enough to where it's still a 4/5, though.
     
  9. Drachna

    Drachna Fourth Year

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    This way definitely well written, if a bit too fluffy for my tastes. A few characters, such as Anakin and Sidious come across as caricatures of themselves, and some of the solutions Obi Wan comes up with are extremely contrived, but I still enjoyed going through it. Not library material though - 2.5/5
     
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