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Resurgence

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by achillax, Jul 24, 2009.

  1. achillax

    achillax Squib

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    Resurgence<o>
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    The apparent death of the Chosen One catalyses a series of changes across the wizarding world. Events unfold with great speed, given the lack of a figurehead on the Light’s side.

    Being the Chosen One has always implied going through sacrifices and sheer emotional and mental torture. There are always new powers to discover, new ships to ply their route, new mysteries to resolve. It is always a reactive process. Why can’t the idea of the Chosen One be interesting and yet fun? A universe where there are always more options than sacrifice or cowardice. Where the hero doesn’t have to sacrifice his life completely. Where he doesn’t have to end up with the girl? Where the villain is actually not stupid. Where friends don’t have to end up in a relationship? Where all characters have a motive and not a cliché? A place where there are no god-life powers but simple luck, preparation and planning. A place where morality is not clear cut.

    This series will attempt to look at Harry Potter fanfiction from a different perspective. A perspective that will try and avoid all clichés and yet be realistic. Let us see how long this contradictory approach lasts.
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    I would like to invite everyone to review this initial chapter of this story in an attempt to provide me feedback with regard to this.

    I will be taking suggestions and attempting to improve the content of this story. Please do highlight any cliches that I do end up overhashing. All useful suggestions are welcome.

    Thanks

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  2. Seratin

    Seratin Proudmander –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    Stick to the default font and move this to work by author. Friendly advice.
     
  3. Zombie

    Zombie Black Philip Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Well, there's a proper posting format for the For Review section, if that's what you want to do, and you can find it in a sticky at the top of the For Review forums.

    Just a heads up.
     
  4. achillax

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    Thanks for the advice. Will do so.

    I'm going to take this down for a bit until I add some more chapters to this story. That should give everyone else a better sense of where this is possibly headed.
     
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  5. reggin

    reggin Filthy Half-Breed DLP Supporter

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    In before Mod of death.
     
  6. sirius009

    sirius009 Minister of Magic

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    Not bad, way way to short to be up for review, or to give a proper review of my own, the writing is solid, however I am really really confused as to what the hell is happening, I'd like to see a little bit of backstory.
    3/5 for the first chapter, it has room for improvment and the only reason I'm rating it this low is for the chapter length and just being confused in general.
     
  7. coleam

    coleam Death Eater

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    Put it in WBA. It has potential, but it needs work.
     
  8. desiking75

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    It has an interesting start, but it's overly enigmatic. Btw, is it slash?
     
  9. achillax

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    It will not be slash.

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