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Abandoned Return by Taure - T

Discussion in 'General Fics' started by BioPlague, Feb 18, 2007.

  1. BioPlague

    BioPlague MD DLP Supporter

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    Title: Return
    Author: Taure
    Rating: T
    Genre: Action/Adventure
    DLP Category: General
    Pairing: Unknown at Present
    Chapters: 7
    Words: 34,063
    Updated: April 5, 2008
    Published: February 18, 2007
    Status: Abandoned

    Summary: It's 2200, and the world has known peace for hundreds of years. Now, a dark power thought to be destroyed is returning, and the world shall find itself woefully unprepared. Meanwhile, at Hogwarts, an interesting artifact is found by a young first year.
    Link: Return (FicWad); Return (FFN)

    Interesting. Caught this while reading another story in review and thought this has definite potential. At the moment, definitely Acceptable; will reserve BPAdvisory judgement for when there's much more up however. Nice writing technique, definitely very good at building an atmosphere to get involved with and a very grabbing start, as far as I'm concerned. May be a bit crazy to start in the year 2200, I'm sure some of you are thinking but give it a spin; I haven't noticed any crazy futuristic crap yet and Siberia is still a wasteland apparently :).

    Very good at writing; let's hope the plot follows.



    Edit by Minion, December 17, 2016
    Taure removed the story from ff.net. The Ficwad link still works, and the story can also be found spread all over Harry Potter Work by Author here on DLP.
     
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  2. Skykes

    Skykes Minister of Magic DLP Supporter

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    It's a bit early to call, but IMO good so far and as bioplauge says he has a good writing technique,thrilling. I'm not sure if it is harry centric though...
     
  3. KenderCleric

    KenderCleric Lord of Plot Bunnies

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    I'll hold off rating, but it's an interesting start and I look forward to the next chapter.
     
  4. Ragon

    Ragon Dark Lord

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    Its okay definitely not up to par with some fics around here but definitely better already that half the fics on ff.net. Its way too early to tell much but it does have potenial. The idea I dont think I have seen before so its gets props for that.
     
  5. Necrule Paen

    Necrule Paen DLP Elite DLP Supporter

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    The ending part was a little too much like LotR for my taste but for the most part it was a good start.

    I would like to see if my suspicions of the diary is anyway accurate.
     
  6. deathinapinkboa

    deathinapinkboa Minister of Magic

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    Well this has me all a twitter. I enjoy the disciption of the boy. Dull-eyes and such.

    I'll not rate it as of yet...but I looks promising.
     
  7. Lord Necros

    Lord Necros Slug Club Member

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    I will reserve judgement till there are more chapters
     
  8. ulkser

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    it looks promising with good descriptions but it is too early to judge. i need more updates to rate it
     
  9. That Wench

    That Wench Skittles Addict

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    Fic's been updated and I must say that this new chapter is pretty damn good... :D

    The plots advancing nicely and I look forward to the next chapter.
     
  10. Dark Lord Rostam

    Dark Lord Rostam Button La Famiglia Midknight

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    I know this is a large bump, but I wanted to review, and show Taure something. In chapter 2, when Arctarus is reading the diary, you say Dumbledore might have dealt the final blow to Voldemort.

    But, you also say that everyone who came out of the veil were killed by Voldemort. Voldemort never killed Dumbledore, and I thought you might want to clarify that. Is that a mistake, or does it include people that Voldemort had killed?

    Other then that, this is an excellent story so far, and I'm looking forwards to some later updates.
     
  11. Klael

    Klael Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    I might be mistaken, but I'm sure that Siberia isn't nice any time of the year.
     
  12. Taure

    Taure Magical Core Enthusiast Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I looked it up on Wiki, apparently it gets damn hot there in the summer. Weird, I know. Anyway, I wanted it to be cold, so I'll call it Global Warming or somesuch. Lol.

    Wow...hmm...thats a biggie. Time to do a JKR...

    Yeah...I meant to write it like that. See, even though Voldemort didn't actively kill him, he was still the architect of his death, and so it still counted...

    /me shifts a bit.

    ANYWAY

    I'm planning to write more of this today, but first I need to go over what I've written already and edit it a bit...add more description, close off plot holes, stuff like that. I feel especially that the ending of the last chapter was a bit rushed.
     
  13. Ragon

    Ragon Dark Lord

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    Taure a question. Might sound dumb but...

    This fic isnt Harry centric is it?
     
  14. Intresting and engaging fic so far. OC's are rather well written. Looking forward to future chapters.
     
  15. Taure

    Taure Magical Core Enthusiast Prestige DLP Supporter

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    Some might be interested to know that I've updated, finally.
     
  16. Palver

    Palver High Inquisitor

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    Greatest chapter yet. Finally Harry is back. Awesome scenes like use of vampiric magic, Harry's defeat, and of course beautiful rebirth. I hope the next update would be sooner and with Harry's action. Great work as always, Taure. This is my favorite fic ATM.
     
  17. Ragon

    Ragon Dark Lord

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    I just noticed that this updated. Sorry

    Im a little confused but otherwise its good. I wanna see Harry kick some major ass.
     
  18. Spanks

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    Good stuff. What about his wand? Did he do something so that it comes back to him?

    Oh, and will anyone recognize the name Harry Potter?
     
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  19. Palver

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    I think his original wand might be confiscated by the Ministry. But if I was Harry, I would store some compatible wand in the cave after anchoring his spirit to the lake.

    I doubt common people will recognize his name - seeing as even Lord Voldemort was an unfamiliar name for Arctarus. Ministry high up's might know after digging in archives and Dark Wizards such as Cain might also recognize him.

    I think that apart from some awesome Harry-kicking-some-ass we will confront a mystery - why people forgot major part of their history. Was that a cover-up as Arctarus suggested?
     
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  20. Ragon

    Ragon Dark Lord

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    It is pretty messed up. I mean I know its possible to forget your history like in the Dark Ages but I dont see that happening in this fic.

    I wanna see what all happened after Harry killed Voldemort.
     
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