Title: Return of the Ravenclaw
Author: kiwithefruit
Rating: T
Genre: Independent?
Pairing: Harry/Susan
Status: WIP
Summary: Post HBP, Harry learns of his linage, another connection to voldemort, and another reason to hate Dumbledore. some new powers but not super harry, Indepedent! harry, darkish but not evil harry.

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2823121/1/

Well i just took a gander at this and well for a lack of better forum to place it i put it here. It's a medioca fic at best but one of the better post HBP out there now, bit of stained-future but readable.

 

I spotted this when it was posted at first but chose not to put it here.
Too clished for my taste. You know excalibur and such.
Harry also get's his powers to easy on the matter. Why he was made the charms master? Cause his mother was one!!!
Didn't click to me at all.

 

The whole fic was filled with cliches and it felt rushed. Also many grammar and spelling errors to.


/Myst

 

I tried this, but to put it shortly... it's irredeemable crap.

 

I happen to like the story to a point, but I think that Harry is throwing his power around a little too much. Besides, it was really the pairing that brought it to my attention.

 

This one needs to go.

 

Wow, this made it into the library at some point?

2/5, in my opinion, and that's only because 1/5 ees fuur ppeole hu kaant speel.

 

I agreed with the last two above me, this needs to go. A 2/5 only because I've seen worse but it definitely needs to go from the Library.

 

I can't believe this is here. 2/5

 

From her A/N at the start:

Lulzy awkwardphrasing. Best part of the story by far.

The author is only semi-literate, which makes it impossible for her to write smart!Harry covincingly.

And then chapter two opens, with a rat-tat-tat of cliches, shot machine-gun style at the reader's head. I bled. From the eyes, even, and I wondered if "physical object", scare-quoted as it was by the author at every opportunity, meant it stood for a mahoosive Clockwork Orange-esque dildo. Sadly, I couldn't read far enough to find out.

Incomplete with no updates since 06, so it's abandoned. Abandoned fics have a much higher bar to get in.

1/5, because I'm feeling particularly generous today.