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Return of the Ravenclaw by kiwithefruit - T

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Lord Osiris, Mar 4, 2006.

1.6666699647903/5, 6 votes
  1. Lord Osiris

    Lord Osiris Auror

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    Mar 4, 2006 #1
    Title: Return of the Ravenclaw
    Author: kiwithefruit
    Rating: T
    Genre: Independent?
    Pairing: Harry/Susan
    Status: WIP
    Summary: Post HBP, Harry learns of his linage, another connection to voldemort, and another reason to hate Dumbledore. some new powers but not super harry, Indepedent! harry, darkish but not evil harry.

    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2823121/1/

    Well i just took a gander at this and well for a lack of better forum to place it i put it here. It's a medioca fic at best but one of the better post HBP out there now, bit of stained-future but readable.
     
  2. Evil Shnitzel

    Evil Shnitzel High Inquisitor

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    Mar 4, 2006 #2
    I spotted this when it was posted at first but chose not to put it here.
    Too clished for my taste. You know excalibur and such.
    Harry also get's his powers to easy on the matter. Why he was made the charms master? Cause his mother was one!!!
    Didn't click to me at all.
     
  3. Myst

    Myst Headmaster

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    Mar 6, 2006 #3
    The whole fic was filled with cliches and it felt rushed. Also many grammar and spelling errors to.


    /Myst
     
  4. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    Mar 6, 2006 #4
    I tried this, but to put it shortly... it's irredeemable crap.
     
  5. Romulus Magnus

    Romulus Magnus Guest

    Mar 8, 2006 #5
    I happen to like the story to a point, but I think that Harry is throwing his power around a little too much. Besides, it was really the pairing that brought it to my attention.
     
  6. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    Aug 3, 2009 #6
    This one needs to go.
     
  7. kmfrank

    kmfrank Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    Aug 3, 2009 #7
    Wow, this made it into the library at some point?

    2/5, in my opinion, and that's only because 1/5 ees fuur ppeole hu kaant speel.
     
  8. Scrittore

    Scrittore Groundskeeper

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    Aug 3, 2009 #8
    I agreed with the last two above me, this needs to go. A 2/5 only because I've seen worse but it definitely needs to go from the Library.
     
  9. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    Aug 4, 2009 #9
    I can't believe this is here. 2/5
     
  10. Perspicacity

    Perspicacity Destroyer of Worlds ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Aug 4, 2009 #10
    From her A/N at the start:
    Lulzy awkwardphrasing. Best part of the story by far.

    The author is only semi-literate, which makes it impossible for her to write smart!Harry covincingly.

    And then chapter two opens, with a rat-tat-tat of cliches, shot machine-gun style at the reader's head. I bled. From the eyes, even, and I wondered if "physical object", scare-quoted as it was by the author at every opportunity, meant it stood for a mahoosive Clockwork Orange-esque dildo. Sadly, I couldn't read far enough to find out.

    Incomplete with no updates since 06, so it's abandoned. Abandoned fics have a much higher bar to get in.

    1/5, because I'm feeling particularly generous today.