Title: Revenge is so Sweet
Author: Arath610
Rating:Mature
Pairing:none, so far
Category: Action/Adventure/General
Status:WIP
Summary: AU 5thYear. Revenge...Never in a million years did Harry think this was going to happen. Betrayed by everyone and everything. Harry finds power within himself and only himself.
Link:http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2793221/1/
Decent, a little predictable, and chapters are a little short.. However major dumbledore bashing and dead ginny all in the first two chapters. Then the typical "harry in azkaban becomes animagus etc." overall too early to tell just how good it will be but it is pretty good..

 

I'm so gonna read it just for the death of Ginny, nice pick Killginny.

 

Its okay. A bit much on the swearing, though. At least he gets the animagus in a non-cliche way.

 

Yea a lot of swearing but still pretty good, i am pissed that it wasn't some graphic torturing death that came ginny's way.

 

This story is... interesting, in kinda crappy sort of way.

Harry's slang I actually found rather amusing, especially considering it was 100% American and proud to be it (with american football references thrown in for good measure). Alberforth was cool too, even with completely screwed up timelines... (Dumbledore should have killed Grimdewald when he was 90, not 17)...

On the other hand, some parts were done rather simplistic and seemed kinda rushed... ok, the whole story seems rushed, but most of it is in a good way (which is called "high tempo", btw). Furthermore, it's only 6,000 words for now, from an author who only has one other 17,000 words story, abandoned after 3 months of writting...

I'll keep an eye on it; it has some potential, but it can still flop easily...

 

yea he did come out with two chapters in one day, the completly american slang is what i like most about it mostly because i am american, hopefully this doesn't get abandoned though..

 

Hmm... I didn't like it because of the American slang, he British. :? Also, the swearing just gets old after a while. Overall, not a very good story.

 

Not really a very good story, but I still found myself enjoying it somewhat.

I'll probably keep reading it, if only to see whether or not this person falls into the trap that most people do of completely losing any sense of direction in the story.

 

its sooo american, jsut the wrting style makes me think of a teenage punk rocker.

I have to ask, would being thrown in azkaban facilitate the transformation into a punk? Because a lot of authors seem to think so. Especially this guy. whats with harry leaving off almost every entry in the diary with "Peace"?

On the up side, the story contains the original twist of Aberforth Dumbledore helping him. But that is only used to help along the cliche of learning martial arts and weapons. Seriously what is the point of learning to wield a sword when you could have aback up wand?

 

Oh, right... swords. I knew there was something that irked me like hell, but I couldn't remember it back when I was typing that review... These days introducing swords (especially large ones) and other outdated weapons as a replacement for wands is a sure way of making me loose interest in a story.

I hope Harry's new american inner self helps him realize how lame using swords is when there are much more powerful weapons laying around (hey maybe even, I don't know, how about MAGIC!?).

 

I wonder if Azkaban actually has an on-site piercing and tattoo parlour.
>goes off to hp fanfic cliche thread to rant about such.

 

yea you would think if harry's going to learn to use a sword he might as well just take a shotgun and blow the heads off some death eaters. Heck next he'll have harry using bow and arrows..

 

This story's going okay.
I was rather pleased to see Harry get his ass booted out of Voldemort's mind when he tried that lovely little fic-tric.
I can't say I mind the "Harry absorbs all of Voldemort's knowledge via the scar link" plot device, but it's nice to see it get not used in such a prominent manner. Make Harry pick up a book instead of just downloading the information from some outside source.
I'd probably swear quite a bit if I had an evil wizard trying to kill me...

 

It was a little rushed with a lot of swearing. But I like it. Plenty of cliche's but its all good.

 

it needs to be better. i stopped reading through half way, can't remember which chapter though.

 

What was up with the whole sword thing? It's one of the biggest cliches around. The only way I would remotely like a story with swrds is if the swords conduct magic, and thus can be used as a wand.

Oh, and this was a little short,. I lke reaqding stories that are at least 20,000 words.

 

Really the story can go either way right now. I mean the cussing and slang a bit much but it adds... something more dont know wat though

The sword is gay just give him 2 wands hell of a lot easier, if he stays of the path of cliche's then it could be good, not great but good.

But one thing is irking me the mysterious man who saved him and without even knowing his god damn name or wat he looks like they already going to do all this shopping and training. Well still it could be good....maybe

 

Well, just about any story an be good, but lots of them have to undergo radical changes first. Still, if the author is a little more careful about cliche, it would make it beter.

 

cliches aren't the be all and end all of fanfictions.

No fic cannot have any cliches, since everythign has been used before. You can have different variants on cliches, but not anythign particularly new.

 

Well, I suppose that's true. Still, originality quickly ups the author's credibility. It also makes for an interesting rad. No one wants to read the same things agan and again. Still, like you said, cliches are unavoidable, so I focus on how few a story has.