hello writer update your story soon

 

Yes please update naga and also please cut down some of the noncliche da members that turned against harry

 

It took me long enough but the next chapter is up. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2855278/8/
Question to anyone who knows how, it involves links in the text of a story. I wanted to credit my Goblyegok source but the link won't show up. Does anyone know what wrong?

 

great chapter even if I dont like Neri... I like that harry kills in the battle and despite that fact that the order does not kill so do they not consider him evil because of that.

 

Good new chapter.

 

I like the fight, but I dont see any sense in that Big-Potter-Castle theme. What the hell does he need a castle for? And he should have solved that glamour problem allready. He knew it would bite him.

 

What glamour problem, Kinglesy thinks its a tracking charm of some sort. *Hint* The glamour and the castle both have their uses further along. Remember that when said castle plays no significant part for the next several chapters.

 

As long as the castle does eventually play a part, you won't be ribbed too badly for it.

 

hopefully the castle wont become a stronghold for harry.
new concept with the dementor/harry thing......weird but new

 

Sweet new chapter I really enjoyed it, the castle/manor was a bit of a turn off if you ask me but apart from that I enjoyed it. Keep the chapters comming man.

 

It seems allright. Nothing great, but it seems interesting enought. Might keep reading to see how it pans out. If harry is now part Vampire/Human/Dementor thing wouldn't he have a new magical signature or something that would screw up all the things that seem to be based on magical signatures?

 

Read it before, Not bad, but the plot is dawdling a but while he and the Elf/Dementer are alternately angsting for each other, or 'Making up'.

 

For those of you who are still reading this the next chapter is finally up. I ended up writing this piece twice, and I think the second try is better. Still it's shorter than I wanted it but I had an interesting stoping point so I left it at that. I'm hoping to get back on track with an update before the next semester starts it January.

 

I really liked this chapter, though I felt the harry snape interaction was Out of Character it seemed snape was a might to civil and less guarded than usual, a little to quick to trust.

and that cliffhanger is fucking evil

madeyemoody

 

This is still active? Cool. Someone link Surry. he wanted Harry/Dementor

 

It would appear as if my death threats have finally bore fruit.

Great new chap Naga, but that cliffy pisses me off, you better have the decency to update soon, or I will have to hurt you....


-Void

 

This could use some revision. There are minor grammatical mistakes scattered throughout that my mind caught. Breaching a topic instead of broaching a topic, Moresmode instead of Mosmorde, etc.

That said, the plot devices used deserve to be cliches, and I was impressed by the battle scenes. Fem!Dementor? Genius! All in all, the creativity far overshadowed any errors in the writing itself.

 

Overall story is ok and unique but that rape part kinda got to me, because tonks is one of the characters i like, and no should have to be raped.

First Post.

 

Rai, You really shound have at least introduced yourself over in the Introduction Section for your first post not here.
Otherwise some of the Mods might take a dim view of you.

 

Its been forever, so long that those who were upset over the cliffhanger had probably forgotten the story. But update.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2855278/9/Rise_of_A_Dark_King
Shame the fight was done the same day I posted the last chapter and the rest has been under review for the past month. Oh well enjoy.

*Braces self for verbal abuse.*