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Oneshot Screams by cloneserpents - T

Discussion in 'Dark Arts' started by The-Hyphenated-One, May 25, 2007.

  1. Ched

    Ched Da Trek Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Oh, 5/5 on this one for sure. Well done indeed. I like how Harry was kept in the background instead of taking a direct role. It made him seem just as dangerous as the background information indicated.

    Great twist as well, I didn't see that one coming until he gave it away.

    EDIT: Ok, I went and read the 3 sequels I could find as well. They are more of a 3.5/5 -- nothing compared to the first. The original one-shot was great not just because of what happened, but more because of what it didn't say and what it left to the imagination. The others lose that.
     
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  2. sincostan

    sincostan High Inquisitor

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    We don't get to see Harry, so the ending is a real bang.

    "Please fill me up and give me a lot of wonderful screams."

    This sentence is wonderful in how deranged it is. Is it sexual? Is it sadistic? A little short (though not undeveloped) but I love it. 5/5.
     
  3. Hypodermic

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    Nice story loved it. There supposed to be two more parts to this story. Either that or two additional stories set in this universe. Reading them now.

    I like the added stories so far my favorite part

    C L: "Did you have anything to do with her apparent murder?"

    H G: "How can it be only 'apparent' you dimwit? The bitch's entrails were strung about the house. Is there some natural cause that will make people expel their intestines that I don't know about?"
     
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  4. XxEnvyxX

    XxEnvyxX Groundskeeper

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    Really good, sadly a little bit short, but such things lose their appeal and flair if they last longer (most author just ruin it then)

    5/5
     
  5. Caleb_Lestrange

    Caleb_Lestrange Backtraced

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    I loved it 5/5 but short but amazing none the less
     
  6. Asylum

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    It's so tasty...
     
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