Title: Seven Times Seven
Author: forexportonly
Rating:M
Genre: General
DLP Category: Time Travel
Pairing: I dunno
Status: wip
Summary: Harry travels to another dimension. He's eleven and his brother, Eric, a seventeen year old is the boy who lived. Harry wants to live a normal life and keep a low profile but when Eric dies, can Harry take up the mantle of boy who lived... again?
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4448247/1/Seven_Times_Seven

 

Found this really difficult to read. The language was awkward and uncomfortable, show not tell was completely thrown out of the window and the whole thing was horribly rushed. All in all, it was terribly flat. Not to mention the secret duelling style of Dumbledore and Harry - charging down a battlefield while holding hands is just fucking stupid.

Chapter two just sucked outright. Crappy smut scene, Draco as the next dark lord was bollocks and introduced with no warning and kung fu Harry is just for attempted coolness.

Skimmed through the rest and just found more shite. It's an insult to the library to suggest that it deserves a place.

 

Absolute crap. I'm sorry, but the story is terrible.

A willing suicide of Dumbledore to weaken Voldemort so Harry could smite the vile villain (Barring Voldemort's words that Harry's shoes were...untied, as to distract). Plot continues to deteriorate, with Harry's wedded life to Ginny dissipating in one affair with Susan Bones, which was poorly crafted and ultimately failing. He has apparently lost his magic, but slowly regains it after skipping dimensions, going back in time, and meeting his brother.

Naturally, Harry wants to avoid any pretense of Voldemort and takes an amicable smoke with his brother. Of course, an eleven year old taking a drag is definitely awesome.

I almost forgot. He flies through the veil and fucks the Goddess of Death (arguable consent), without a moment's hesitation.

1/5.

 

How does all that manage to happen in two chapters?

 

This story was way too fucking rushed, and made little to no sense. 1/5, this doesn't even deserve the Recycling Bin.

 

The writing wasn't too bad, honestly. The content on the other hand, which is what ultimately counts, sucked balls.

1/5

 

OK I'll review it while I'm reading.

Dumbledore and Harry holding hands, gay. If it was a hot girl it would be OK.

A suicide spell? WTF? If there was a suicide spell, it would just kill you. Not weaken some random dark lord but wait.. how the hell is it a suicide spell when he turned into a arrow? and Dumbledore spirit rising to the sky?

Draco Malfoy becoming the next dark lord? He's a squib.

Karate is just like the other person said to make it seem cool, it's just overly used in my opinion, I mean a wizard would blast your ass before you had a chance.

The affair with Susan bones sucked ass and ginslut is a cock sucker

Fucking lady death, yeah right. How lame...

Harry getting memories of his new life and retaining his ones from the old life and just accepting it just like that is stupid and unrealistic.

And all this happened in 2 short chapters...

1/5 and you only got the 1 because the writing wasn't bad but like Memory King said the content sucked balls.

 

It wasn't terrible. It certainly isn't DLP material, but it is eons ahead of the type of stuff on the WTF fics thread.

I still didn't like it. 2/5

And Scott? Welcome to DLP.
I would have welcomed you on your intro, but I didn't want to necro.

 

I attempted to read it but couldn't. THe writing style is a little awkward but it isn't bad. I will give it a little originality for the fic starting at a different point but will have to dock it for the use of a prophesy referring to a never-gonna-happen isntance with our hero. It isn't obvious to the sheep but defenitly can be seen as the ever traveling dimension hopper Harry Potter.

2/5. It's not DLP material but I am sure there are plenty out there that will enjoy it.

 

0/5

Not really even worth the comments

 

What the fuck at Dumbledore and Harry's "unique" dueling style. And what's up with Eric; giving his 11 year old brother a cigarette to smoke? Really realistic shit.

 

Ewww...Not even worth following the link for. Absolute shit on a stick with barely any redeeming qualities. .5/5