Title: Shades of Black
Author: Sera dy Relandrant
Rating: T
Genre: Drama/Humor
DLP Category: Alternate
Pairing: None yet.
Status: Book one is complete, but the second book continues in the same story.
Summary: AU Prophecies are specifically worded. Rose Iris Potter thinks she's fabulous. Except Uncle Padfoot everyone else thinks she's a brat. Features Neville as the Boy who Lived, ambiguous Draco, living Marauders and plenty of pureblood lore.

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3783551/1/Shades_of_Black

I'm a little hestiant to post this as I'm not sure if it is the typical ficiton of the people on this forum, but it the best of it's kind that I have ever read. Every character is OOC, but every character is really well devloped and has reason to be how they are. I've seen loads of female Harry Potter stories, but none of them have anything on Rose.

I know this is said a lot, but this story does get better as it goes along. It starts off okay... not awful, but not great. As it gets further into the story the chapters get longer, the characters get more defined and the writing improves.

It is quite a light story with dark aspects mingled in. It sort of follows the story line of the first book. The basic principles are the same but things happen differantly. It is orginal yet belivable. Rose Potter has taken the place of my favourite character ever written. I would highly recomend this fiction to anyone. The author also updates frequently with decent length, good quality chapters and is mature enough to accept constuctive critism.

 

Chapter 10 is titled "Mmm" and Chapter 2 is titled "Of Cousins and Orgies."

Chicklepea, got the fuck off this sight. I bet you're fat, ugly, and enjoy anime.

 

My hour, if not day, is ruined, but only because I read the first couple of paragraphs before my interest plunged into rock bottom.

There are certain genres of which the best specimens are still rancid shit, like male impregnation. Even if this story is the best of its kind, it still sucks.

What I gathered from the summary and category is that it is interaction-heavy. Meaning, no action that isn't necessary to the plot, but the main character coming to terms with her reputation, characters exchanging one-liners that the author believes are humorous.

It will be the last time I give a non-Harry - actually, more of a non canonCharacter-centric - fic the benefit of the doubt.

Actually, this quote make me laugh. The author bolded Neville, but again, it guillotined any interest in reading about Rose angsting over his odiousness.

Edit: I checked the reviews, and there did turn out to be an action sequence in 42. It might have been more impressive had magic actually been involved.

 

Yea. You just killed it there, let me guess "Rose" falls in love with Draco/Neville and they have a foursome with Dudley. I would read it as, i do like Fem!Harry fics however, this seems more like an excuse for Slash.

 

You were quite wise to feel "hesitant" to post this story here, and perhaps even a bit "brave" as well to even attempt it. However, this story has a few "problems":

This bit in the author's profile:
Extra Information: I am Rose Potter. Rose Potter is me. If you want to know anything more about me, read Shades of Black.

That alone is frightening, even before I began to read the story.

As for the story itself:
Neville is the BWL - neutral (could be good or bad)
Harry is a girl named "Rose" - Rose is a cliched name, Fem!Harry is unbelievably difficult to write as the main character - we're all quite used to Harry as a guy.
Sirius' characterization as a bit of a slime ball - this part I actually kind of liked.
The "Orgies" Chapter - not nearly as bad as it first sounded; actually somewhat amusing.
Zacharias is a main character? - Eh.

But most importantly...
It actually isn't horrible - the story wasn't so bad, really. I just can't see how it could possibly end well. First year or so is all well and good, and the plot isn't horrific - but I'm not sure how this could evolve into a story that I'd like in the future years. The story is so blatantly a Mary Sue in some ways, it's almost refreshing to see an author be honest about it.

In a way, I'd almost like to see this story succeed - it's writing truly does improve measurably from the first chapters, and some of its concepts aren't bad at all. All I can say is - beware the kneejerk reaction.

The description may be cringe-inducing (and the profile more so), but it's far from the worst story I've ever read.

Aside from my accidental thread rating, I'd say this story deserves a solid:
2.5/5 - almost average quality, but not quite.

-J

 

Deathinapinkboa
1. Anime? If I ever read/watch/play it, I'll let you know if I enjoy it.
2. I don't do fat
3. I don't do ugly
I think you mean "get the fuck off this site" and my answer would be "Go fuck yourself, no one else will"

You mentioned the chapter titles and I have to admit that I have never read them. Although "Of Cousins and Orgies" was actually quite amusing and, no, there are no cousins having orgies in the chapter. It is NOT one of those stories.

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Andromalius

I admit that I wasn't sure about people enjoying this story. And like I said, the begining isn't great. In fact I'm rereading it and at chapter 10 it is still not up to the standard it is up to now.

I'm not sure what you mean by action, if you mean action as in fighting then there is only a little. About the same amount as there is in the Philosiphers Stone. If you mean in and around the characters and discription wise, then that DOES improve and drastically. It isn't one of those knock back and forth one liner stories. I dispise those too. And I wouldn't say it is one of those stories where the character "comes to terms with their reputation," either.

I wouldn't say Rose angsted over his odioursness, I mean, she's five in that chapter, and in all fairness Rose doesn't seem to like most people. She just blatently said that she didn't like him... It's hard to defend the story because as I re read it I notice a lot of typos and can see how differant it is to how the future chapters are.

I'm guessing most aren't going to like it from the response. It's just agravating because the plot is so well done in later chapters and the personality in the writing is just so nice... I'll have to pursuade her to rewrite the first half...

ForsakenOne
I don't know actually. The author has said that it will not be Rose/Nevile, but that is all that she will say. I doubt that there will be slash. Unless Rose turns out to be gay, I might have to let you know that she might JUST date a guy.

Jeram
I admit that I haven't thought how she will do the later books. I'm actually quite curious how Rose will mature and whether she will lose her character if she does.

I did ask the author about Rose, mainly because it is the type of character I like. It reminds me of Lyra from the Northen Lights. She said that Rose is based off of herself when she was eleven. I hadn't read her profile but I sort of understood where she was coming from with that. It is easy to base a character around yourself, since you have a ready-made character, but you have to remember to include your faults, and she has done that.

Zacharias as a main character; I still have not a bloody clue! I mean, he IS a character that gets a bit of air time, and does hold some role in the plot, but I don't know why she chose those two as the main characters for the description part.

Thankyou for giving the story a chance.

 

This is a waste of fucking time. Not only does it not feature Harry Potter, which is, you know... the entire fucking reason for the entire genre... but it features completely benign twists of Canon!Characters.

You can try and convince me that Rose is the Fem!Harry... and I'm going to continue laughing at you.

I read a few chapters of this... the grammar and structure are fine, but what's in them, is just a complete waste of my time.

This doesn't even deserve a rating.

It needs to get the fuck out of here.

 

Correction: basing a character on yourself is <i>lazy</i>.

You said that it gets better, but the effort expended skimming over more than 10 chapters to get to anything good renders reading the entire thing pointless.

 

That is all.

 

If you haven't worked out this little tidbit yet, let me give it to you:

DLP is a masculine site. Even our revered members-without-penises have a balanced formula of feminine and masculine traits (masculine =/= manly, and feminine =/= girly, by the by). Posting such a feminine story is, hence, very stupid. And yes, despite the female main characters "independence" and "loner/bitchy" attitude, she is still an anti-masculine character.

So, the GTFO of our interbuts if a very accurate sentiment.

I don't hate you, but seriously. If Harry Potter isn't in it, we're probably not going to want to read it.

 

I actaully like this story. I wouldn't have posted it here but I still think its good.

 

Comment on the story or don't post.

 

wouldn't the 'I actually like this story' part of the sentence count as commenting on the story?

sorry, Knee jerk reaction is to correct that type of thing, it tends to annoy people

as for the story its self... not my kettle of fish. I can see where a certain type of fan would like this type of thing, but not I.

I'll refrain from rating it as I can't get into it enough to love or hate it.

 

I read a good chunk of it... and my rating will stand at 1/5, since I can't give it less then that.

 

well written but...

Its not Harry-centric so I couldn't get past the first two chapters. You're probably not going to get good reviews on a dark, violent, Harry-centric forum for which this story is none of. So next time when you have a thought...let it go.
Thus, as it does not fall into the criteria I cannot rate it.

 

It was irritating and boring and going to be Ron and Ginny heavy I reckon. 2/5. Not for me...

Fancy introducing yourself SlytherinSupreme? Not every story in the library has Dark/Violent!Harry. If your only going to rate stories of that ilk, tell us in an introduction, everyone else has given it a go and rated it even though it isnt their cup of tea. You offer no justification for being so arrogant

 

James Potter is........."smiley man" . It wasnt terrible it just wasnt good. I disliked it but I cant say that there arent people out there who would. Wrong site to post it on though.......Mugglenet might enjoy it.

 

That's an insult.

 

It was meant that way.........