Title: Shadow of Azkaban
Link:Shadow Of Azkaban (DLP)
Fiction Rated: T
Genre: Action/Adventure
Pairing: none....yet
Status: WiP
Summary: Harry goes to azkaban. Harry gets out somehow. Harry gets a new life all thats left is taking care of loose ends from the past...as in killing a few people...he just has to figure out how.

Its been here for a while...so I decided to make one of these...hehe

 

The first thing that pops out is some of the spelling, like the Dersely. Also brake instead of break. There are a few other spelling errors but I wont list them. Other then that so does it seam to be an interesting story but it is a bit to early to tell...

 

it was good for a first chapter. but i am watching vanilla sky so i cannot say more.

 

...it up to ch 7... I'm working on ch8 now

 

I like this story keep up the good work. Matter of fact i like most azkaban Storeys yours is in the top ten at least.

 

I agree on the top ten Azkaban stories but, a lot of the Azkaban stories I have read are bad and only a select few (relatively speaking) are good.

 

Personally, I disliked it, mainly from the noticable amount of spelling mistakes and short chapters. I know that I'm not the best at grammar, but I try to get the right words.

My main beef is against the mass of description which gets irritating to read through, that and I'm a Grammar Nazi and some of your sentences just made me get annoyed.

Keep working on it though, I'm just one of a few who dislike your story, I think the majority likes it though.

 

over all, a very good story, but the only complaint or advice i can give anyone with a well written story like yours, is to proof read it at least once...that way everyones happy

 

Updated. My muse still fly in a unpredictable way. But don't worry I want to finish this fic regardless of how long it takes. With that said, read the new chapter and review.

 

Grammar and spelling errors are everywhere.
You wrote 'Dersely' instead of 'Dursley'. And many other mistakes...
If you want to improve your fic, fix those first.