That was strange yeah but don't you find it annoying how apparently harry had been setting stuff up since the end of fourth year and the author can't be bothered to give us some info on how but instead flashes back to things you have already read?

 

New chapter of this fine story is finally up.

It's not bad but could be better. She did a redeemed!Voldemort thing rather well, save for some gayness in their instant-brotherly relationship. Evil!Ginny plot is rather nice too. Blaise is maybe a little too perfect and sureal (as is Harry, in all honesty), but I guess appearances are 90% of this story, so that can be excused.

Anyway, if you haven't read this, do it. It's the best heir of Slytherin story at the moment, especially if you don't mind (or like) slightly lyric/poetic writing style.

 

I rather like this story, I especially like how Voldy was redeemed was done but it pisses me off how easy Tom allowed the Defence Teacher to be part of the group going down into the chamber, He was cursed by someone in the same order as the teacher, if it was me would I not allow him near me no matter what oaths he had taken.

 

Did anyone else go "WTF IS THIS STUPID PEICE OF SHIT" when they were reading this or is it just me?

 

OMFG! TRHG is just DISGUSTING! I hate redeemed Tom, that SUX.

 

lol, promios you sound like one of those girls on msn who go: Like omg, wtf is this, stfu, that sux...

Although I have never heard of TRHG. Whats that?

 

TRHG is tom and hermione. The saving of Tom doesn't really bother me as much as the thing with the soul twisting.

 

I think it would be interesting to see Hermoines reaction to finding out she was lusting after Tom.

 

she just raised her wand at him only to lower it get all chummy after the he is good now explanation. The author could have done that part better over all the new chapter was a good read

 

Pretty good writing style, aside from minor errors. But the story suffers from lack of noticeable character and world development. Harry suddenly goes by Hadrian, Draco gains an older brother who's not a Voldemort supporter, the back-story isn't explained sufficiently. Harry's sudden transformation into the perfect Slytherin is especially jarring.

The most disappointing thing is how Harry/Blaise was rushed, and that Harry was accepted in her clique almost immediately.

Narration is clumsy in some parts, the repeated sequences don't add anything to the story.

The whole thing with redeeming Voldemort is the final straw in my opinion.

Overall a disappointment, because this author has a lot of potential.

2/5