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WIP Special Edition By WriterOfFortune - Worm

Discussion in 'Worm' started by Halt, Apr 29, 2020.

  1. Halt

    Halt 1/3 of the Note Bros. Moderator

    May 27, 2010
    Title: Special Edition
    Author: WriterOfFortune
    Rating: [Censorship Hooo! Movie and Fanfic rating systems accepted.]
    Status: WIP
    Fandom: Worm
    Pairings: N/A
    Summary: N/A
    Link: Spacebattles

    "Taylor sees the future and shares it with the world through PHO, in the style of news reports. It's based on a movie from years ago, where someone got tomorrow's newspaper every day, and the whole premise is that Taylor sells her predictions to people and serves as a strictly neutral party akin to Toybox. This leans heavily on the PHO excerpts rather than an actual narrative, but it works for it a lot better than it should, and I enjoyed it." -Agayek

    @Quiddity @Sauce Bauss @Feoffic @Agayek @Vira @Paradise tagged for liking thread.

    Personally, I enjoyed the heck out of this story. Very much an example of how PHO Interludes can be used to DRIVE NARRATIVE rather than just be a reaction fluff piece to pad the word count. The interludes are well done and give us a hint of both what has been going on behind the scenes, internal character motivations, and expanding on the ripples caused by this AltPower Taylor.

    It doesn't hit any stations of canon either.

    Overall, a good read, excellent technical execution, well-thought out work.

  2. Paradise

    Paradise Paraplegic Dice DLP Supporter

    Jun 21, 2015
    Pine Tree State
    Its fairly good, my major criticisms are

    The character is never really explored you see bits and pieces of them by what they post but they never grow.

    Its short, thats basically the defining piece of my criticisms, its too short and too slow to really be explored in any measure of detail, if it had been longer it would be an excellent fic, but I'm going to have to give it a


    I've decided that if we are grading a story on the authors ability to write, their ability to write consistently and finish things should be part of the score.
  3. Puzzled

    Puzzled High Inquisitor

    Jul 24, 2014
    It's funny seeing DLP discover Worm, and in the process go through the same cycles of fanfiction that eventually led us all here.

    I've gotten really frustrated with it over the last year or so, mainly because Taylor's depiction in fanfiction is constructed from memes and escalation. This story shares the same problem. Towards the end she's just a caricature of herself who's effortlessly outplotting the entire world. That was fine when there were just reactions, but eventually there's no fun seeing yet another Taylor with an incredible power casually winning forever. As you guys get further into the fandom I think you'll start to feel the same way.

    It is well written and it's a neat premise, but alternate(over)powered Taylors have a firm cap. 3.5/5 rounded down.
  4. Feoffic

    Feoffic Alchemist DLP Supporter

    Jul 14, 2006
    This is one of the few alt-power stories I've reread more than once.because the hook is interesting and it doesn't take long to read. Everything is well executed, and this is the only story that I can think of that does the PHO format well. I like that we only have two short-ish arcs and a couple interludes to read, and I could never see another update and be perfectly happy. If the story had continued, it probably would have fallen into the same traps as other alt/over-powered Taylor fics and been a massive disappointment.

    This story is the fanfic equivalent of popcorn. Easy and fast to read, satiates the need to read a certain kind of story, and is gone right before you regret it. 3.5/5 rounded up.
  5. Vira

    Vira Second Year ~ Prestige ~

    Dec 20, 2006
    High Score:
    Yeah, story started off pretty fun and I liked it while I was reading it, but exploring what Taylor's power could do grew boring once I realized she was way too powerful. It takes all the suspense out the story since she's basically unbeatable.

    Story's abandoned anyways, so that's just how it's going to end.

  6. Zombie

    Zombie Black Philip Moderator DLP Supporter

    Apr 28, 2007
    Pretty much full circle. At this point just finding fics that aren't absolutely garbage or isn't SBs trend of the week.
  7. Donimo

    Donimo High Inquisitor

    Jul 4, 2015
    I generally agree with you Puzzled, however I think this fic is an exception due to how it's written. It's like how even rehash fics can be interesting if you just change perspective to something novel.
  8. Quiddity

    Quiddity Headmaster

    Apr 14, 2014
    New Zealand
    I enjoyed the story, though the live action elements less, and it suffers from getting just far enough to hint at something interesting without ever going there. A solid 4/5 from my point of view.

    Cheers for the tag, @Halt.
  9. Celestin

    Celestin The Cursed Child

    Aug 21, 2008
    I will give it 4/5 for proving the concept and doing it quite well.
  10. thejabber27

    thejabber27 Groundskeeper

    Jan 4, 2012
    I'll say outside of the pre-cog not really being characterised as Taylor this was enjoyable. 4/5
  11. Sauce Bauss

    Sauce Bauss Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

    Apr 4, 2008
    I'll concur. The best example of the format given, fun, and doesn't really leave you feeling gutted that there isn't more coming. An easy 4/5 rec.
  12. GrandHighPoobah

    GrandHighPoobah Third Year

    Feb 8, 2010
    I'll echo everyone else saying this is one of the best uses of this format I've seen.

    The bits of story here that aren't conveyed through the medium of the PHO news posts are the weakest. The style of news reporting lends itself to opening up the audience's imagination in a really effective way - I found myself actually enjoying filling in the gaps that the news stories leave and I think that there's a really good balance of how much is shown to the audience vs. what is actually happening. So much is implied, and it really works.

    Where this story loses some points is that there really aren't any stakes - the narrative itself is not the focus of the story; it's all about the meta-narrative of what Taylor's existence as a precog entails and how that influences t, and Taylor is essentially omniscient here, so we really needed a fixed POV character that can stand-in for the audience and be somebody we can invest emotional energy into. I think the "real time" interludes from the news postings were the author's attempt at doing this, to keep things lively by putting some characters in harm's way, but they fall flat due to the deterministic nature of Taylor's power and the fact that they are more or less one offs, so there's no real sense of investment in them for me - I would have preferred the POV of a character with an antagonistic relationship with Taylor if anything, balking against the idea that the future is set in stone unless you have access to Taylor's power.

    This format lends itself to a short form, very concise story. That this story is abandoned isn't a surprise - it basically ran out of gas, and I'm sure that the author struggled to find new ground to cover. It's unfortunate, because the basic format was handled really well, and while I enjoyed what was there, it was inherently unsatisfying due to a lack of focus and closure.

    3/5, probably 4/5 if it were not abandoned.
  13. Anarchy

    Anarchy Half-Blood Prince DLP Supporter

    Dec 12, 2009
    Here's my review from a year ago -

    "Fun little story. It’s just kinda weirdly meta. Reading a forum-based story on a forum. At least the hole doesn’t go deeper with PHO-based meta fanfiction written by Glory Girl. I will say, despite my general dislike of the over-abundance of PHO chapters in the fanfiction community as a whole, I do wish this story was still actively updating. Only complaint is that Taylor doesn’t really feel like Taylor. I get that there’s a group of people who won’t read non-Taylor Worm stories, but this story could have played out pretty much the same if it was just an OC. Hell, you could have a very similar story if it was just Dinah instead."

    Now, having read that, idk if the story has actually been updated since I read it.
  14. Mutton

    Mutton Unspeakable

    Feb 20, 2011
    I just entirely put the idea of it being Taylor out of mind. It was a fun thing; I read it kind of like enjoying Psychohistory in Foundation. The last chapters where they abandoned the format were subpar but didn't wreck the overall experience.