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Sunderance by Xipho - M

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Xiph0, Mar 10, 2006.

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  1. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    Mar 10, 2006 #1
    Title: Sunderance
    Author: Xipho
    Rating: R-M
    Genre: Horror, Dark Comedy
    Pairing: N/A
    Status: Discontinued.
    Summary: Set in the summer after Book 2, Harrys ideals have snapped. Buckling under the strain of his principles being reversed he snaps out at the nearest to him, muggles. No Pairing
    Link: Work by Author

    It's been ripped off of FF.net.

    Any comments, flames, critiques are welcomed equally.
     
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  2. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Mar 10, 2006 #2
    Very good start I say... I love it... ive always dug a psycho Harry...obviously
     
  3. Lost_soul

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    Mar 10, 2006 #3
    Dark very dark, the youngest dark Harry I have seen yet. I like the part about Gryffindor first time I have herd anything that doesn’t make him the grate saviour that defeated the dark lord Slytherin
     
  4. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    Mar 10, 2006 #4
    :twisted: Thanks

    Yah, well Chapter 2 is up.
     
  5. ghst.san

    ghst.san Sixth Year

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    Mar 12, 2006 #5
    Dunno about this fic. I cant understand why Harry snaps. Sure his ancesters where a bunch of ideots but thats no reason to simply kill. Espacially at such a jung age.
    Also Harry seems to hate Dumbledore, but why the hell is that so? He has no real reason to. At least none is mentioned.

    How is Harry able to cast the AK? Sure, according to your fic he has the emmotion, but that isn't all. You also need the right movements and the right pronunciation.
     
  6. Yarrgh!

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    Mar 12, 2006 #6
    And he didn't even know the words to the curse in his 4th year. The mudblood knew them, and he was sorta perplexed until he found out that it was the killing curse.
     
  7. Dark Lord Rostam

    Dark Lord Rostam Button La Famiglia Midknight

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    Mar 12, 2006 #7
    No, I think it said that he read the curses in the book. It was some the curses his ancestor's used.

    Also why did he snap that I dont get either. We know his ancestor wasn't Griffyndor, because he ws castrated, so why did he snap.

    If you can explain everything properly then this story would be quite good.
     
  8. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    Mar 13, 2006 #8
    I figured this would come up, but it is my own view that "power" is a misused restraint in fanfiction.

    For all my fics, and in my head it is merely words that focus power from everything around you. Energy radiating from everything living and all wizards and witches draw on this continous source.

    Yes, this means that someone in my fic will only be stronger if they know more.
    :nods: I did indeed.

    Thanks to everyone who pointed out what confused them and things I didn't mention, I'll try to work it all in and more smoothly explain it.
     
  9. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Mar 13, 2006 #9
    Of course I love Psycho!Harry so I love this too... :D

    Whoever said this is the youngest Dark!Harry should go read my story... >.>... he is 8 when he burns the Dursley's house down with them inside.
     
  10. Dark Lord Rostam

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    Speaking of your story Syaoran...UPDATE. *shakes fist at Dark Syaoran* Update.
     
  11. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Errr.... I was away for the weekend so yeah... sorry about that.

    Keep it up Xippy. I expect more! MORE!
     
  12. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    ^_^ Cool, I'm working on the chapter right now AMF.

    Syao: You have 2002 posts dude! /snickers.

    Chapter up, not nearly as long as I'dve liked, and I was a bit distracted.
     
  13. Dark Lord Rostam

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    Mar 15, 2006 #13
    Dont care that it's short , I'm just happy there dead. W00T
     
  14. Mrriddler

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    Mar 15, 2006 #14
    hmm, psycho Harry... would have prefer if there was a reason why Harry killed those three but oh well. Definitely interesting start. I would reiterate what others have said about explaining more of what made Harry snap, but it could very well be that you plan on explaining what happened later, so mehe... In any case, good luck on the story.

    PS: Can we assume you dropped the other story you were working on what not? Sorry if you mentioned this already, but I haven't been around much.
     
  15. Ginny Killer 2.0

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    yay! the stuiped gryffindorks are dead. three cheers and a bottle of booze for everyone :)
     
  16. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    Mar 15, 2006 #16
    What other reason but secrecy and annoyance does someone who wants solitude need?

    Yeah, I abandoned the other one.. was way to out-landish to work.

    /drinks his bottle of booze and lets G.K2.0 know his avatar kicks ass.
     
  17. Mrriddler

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    Mar 15, 2006 #17
    Shrug, surprise me?

    You really must be drunk cause unless you know something we don't, it says 'he' is a she under that kick ass avatar. :D
     
  18. Ginny Killer 2.0

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    * looks down at breasts and pats crotch....... yup definitly female :)
     
  19. bornagainpenguin

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    Mar 28, 2006 #19
    [sighs]

    The FF.not link appears to be dead. Can anyone confirm? I am currently backing up the DLP.net version of the fic...

    --bornagainpenguin
     
  20. Schilling

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    yes, link to ff.net is dead.
     
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