I've always loved him going into Slyth or Raven just to get away. Personally Slyth. for this story ecause I would love to see how the Hierarchy would work in your Harry's view. Maybe while hes in Slyth. you can do a couple of other POV. for a chapter.

Sure give me the E-mail and I'll do my work 8)

 

Eh, Last thing before I finish my outline.

If Harry was to be resorted in Slytherin, what do you think of having a new Head of House? Snape is difficult to write without repeating yourself:

Snape glared at Harry.

Harry Glared Back

Snape upped the GlarePower.

Harry added a sneer

Snape shot him his Boltron Glare #3

Harry stepped back in fear

Snape smirked in Victory

Harry: How?

Snape: I am your father!

*Harry's magical glamour cast by Lily drops and he looks like Snape. Raises hand to the heavens*

Harry: I can't believe you Mum, You Ho!

Snape Smirks in Victory...again.

Harry: Ok, well. Can you teach me the cloak trick?

Snape: Yes, my dear son, Darius Snape.

*Hugs Him and they go on their merry way*


The End.

*Shrug*

Snape's actions are kinda limited to Glower,glare, scream Potter, insult Griffie Intelligence, etc.

What do you think about Slughorn coming back to be Head of House? Somehow, I gotta get rid of Snape. What do you think?

 

Voldemort could increase his spplies for potion needs after Harry, in chapter 4 fucks up his forces. Snape forced to leave and cant go to the Order or be Head of House. Dumbles is forced to get a new one. Shacklebolt, few realized was once a Slytherin and since fired by the Ministry for helping Dumbles he goes to help.

By doing this you bring in a potentially powerful ally, and can help us learn about an intresting lesser used Character. SInce he got an O in potions when he was younger also was a part healer forced to be a low master in Potions. This helps him certify his position and he makes potions fun for the kids while still subtely making house points in Slythy favor.

 

Chapter Three is Posted. Finally.

I apoligize for the 2 weeks delay, but I was trying to get it right. It has been finished for a good while now, but it just felt wrong. Even now, it sounds different from the rest of the story.

Criticize.

Oh, Last thing. I won't be updating this story at FicWad until someone shows me how to upload stories while saving the text styles (Italic, Bold, etc). Copy/Paste, converting to .txt or .html all remove the styles. As I use them alot in the story, it takes too long to insert the tags.

Look for it at Fanfiction.net, link posted at the bottom.

Don't forget to review or give suggestions. I'm not going to get all pissy and say "This isn't your fucking story, fuck off...". They help put stuff into perspective and help me finish the story quicker.

 

Nice chapter :cheers:

 

Go for it! I am sure I and everyone else in this forumwill enjoy it!

 

Sure we will!

 

Wow. YOur story is REALLY good.

Favorite line of dialogue EVER!!!

Okay your age is...24. Old enough to take a dark view of things. Not a rebellious teenager with the "Dumbledore is evil" fallacy.

I REALLY like your stories. I think you may be my favorite author. YOur writing is good, and you bring original ideas.

Some of the writing was confusing, and I'm not referring to the Harry/ Voldemort fusion and misuse of phrases. I'm talking about earlier, when Harry had visions of Voldemort's past. Sometimes it would break up the rhythm of the story, and an emotional beat would be lost.

That aside, this is FANTASTIC!!!


UPDATE!!!!

 

This is a great story, I really like that Harry is taken over by Voldemorts memories. In other stories when he gets access to Voldemorts memories so dont they affect him at all which is just annoying

 

Chapter 4 posted.

Sorry for the wait. I had a hard time writing an entertaining dueling scene that didn't stop the plot, focus on the dueling, and restart again.

I think I failed there.

I decided to extend the story even further. Harry won't be torturing his relatives in this chapter, although they will be tortured quite greusomely.

I refuse to have Harry just "snap" and go uber!Dark. It's a slow, sensual process that dances on the fine line.

Mods: Can you change the thread's title and first post to reflect the new rating? It's now 'M".

Comments and Suggestions are helpful as always.

Drop a review at FF.net,

Amerision

 

I have a question. If he used Accio Vials would they have all came toward him, and would they have all died?

Awesome chapter, this has to be one of my favorite stories.

EDIT: Never mind, I didn't finish the chapter and was jut wanting to jot this down.

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Had to add that. I loved this chapter.

 

If he Accio'd the Vials of every Death Eater he had seen, they should have died. The vials would fly at him (they did - Harry dove out of the way. The vials hit the window behind him.)

However, remember the shimmer Harry felt, the one that he passed off as part of his imagination?

That was the wards altering to accomadate their precsene. Dolohov comments on this by saying that Harry was several seconds late.

But yes, if the wards hadn't been changed, thy would have all died rather gruesome deaths, propelled out of the house and 100+ mph.

 

Yeah, I edited my post after reading that part of the chapter....splash.

 

Yeeooowww awesome chapter, i read incredibly slowly so that i could savour every bit of it! i enjoyed the entire dueling scene but mainly the one on one between Harry and Dolahov towards the end. Just one point i thought you said that if Harry was to use any dark spell the ministry would pick it up? I was of the opinion that "explodra" was a dark destruction curse, would it not register with the ministry wards or not?

 

He used it after the wards were pretty much neutralized/

 

By then, the wards adjusted to the death eaters so Harry could do what he wanted.

 

*big smile*

Loved it, man. Especially the part where he is wading through the blood. Reminds me of a song from "Trigun."

 

great chapter!!

Now the question becomes what The Order will do. Will they be dissapointed at him for killing even to protect himself or congratulate him on surviving against so many death eaters?

 

You'll have to wait and see

The real plot will be revealed in Chp 5 or 6.

I think you guys will enjoy it, as it has never been done.

And Rookwood will be playing a more significant role in the story.

 

Very good story. I thought the whole Tom Riddle mixed with Harry Potter part in chapter 3 was confusing, but it's done now I hope. I really enjoyed the battle scene. Harry was not too powerful, but powerful enough defend himself. Really good.