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Abandoned Temptations of a Dark Soul by Amerision - T

Discussion in 'Dark Arts' started by Dark Syaoran, Mar 31, 2006.

  1. MysterioX

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    Good chapter. A plot that has not yet been done! Care to explaine a bit?
     
  2. Amerision

    Amerision Galactic Sheep Emperor DLP Supporter

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    How far would you go to achieve the ultimate pleasure and dream?

    What will you do for the person that gives it to you?

    Even if it's artificial.

    Lord Voldemort's side just got a little bit more enticing...

    Curse/Charms Used:

    Euphio!

    Amoria!


    Excerpt from Augustus Rookwood's Diary:

    We've found them...the other two. Pleasure and Euphoria beyond comprehension...

    Dream...or Curse?

    In some ways they are worse than the other three. Killing and Torturing are so much cleaner...

    Even Mind Control can be broken eventually.

    But what will you do when you don't want to fight it? This is beyond simple release.

    This musn't fall into the hands of my master. No one can have this power.

    I've obliviated the rest of the team, and have hidden the knowledge far, far away.



    later...


    This will hopefully be my last entry, the Aurors are coming for me.

    Jugson spilled under veritaserum last night...

    ~~~~~

    ...it doesn't matter. I'll take it to Azkaban, and from there, to the grave. No one can get it there.

    I've done my part for wizardkind.




    A sneak peak into the future. :)
     
    Last edited: May 18, 2006
  3. Ivy_Snowe

    Ivy_Snowe Second Year

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    Good fic. I actually like the way it's done...
     
  4. Dark Lord Rostam

    Dark Lord Rostam Button La Famiglia Midknight

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    I hope you don't kill off Dolahov too fast I like him. Also, don't make the whole Inner circle weak like in most stories. Him beating them al is really dumb, hell even one is a tough match for him until the absorption is done.
     
  5. Amerision

    Amerision Galactic Sheep Emperor DLP Supporter

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    Nah, Dolohov will probably be the last to die.

    I like his character. I spent too much time developing him (several sentences it was) to have him die.

    And yes.

    Harry and Bella will get it on for some time, although Harry will kill her. Just not for the reason you think.

    What'd you think of the excerpt two post up?
     
  6. Dark Lord Rostam

    Dark Lord Rostam Button La Famiglia Midknight

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    It makes me want more. Seems very intresting. Whatever it is that made him hide it from Voldemort must be big. Can't wait.
     
  7. Lord Osiris

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    Here, here! i'm bouncing around like Ginslut on dick waiting for your next chappie. That excert was good but it questions Rookwood's ultimate loyalty. He fights for a cause that he believes will be the victor yet he hides what would more then likely be what tips the scales in sheer manpower as like you said its so much more inticing then that of blackmail, and the death of a potential recruit.
     
  8. cu_cullen9

    cu_cullen9 Second Year

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    I just read this story and i like how harry gets confused about who he is after absorbing all these memories. better then those get voldermonts knowlege and everythings fine deal.
     
  9. ulkser

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    original!!!

    i like the way harry got tired while fighting against D.Es. in most fics harry just kills 20 DEs in 5 minutes. you defined harry's power very well.

    i agree about killing rockwood the last. however, if you gonna make this story harry/bella in future than please don't kill her. please. i like her character (ruthless killer-torturer, crazy) a lot.

    if Rockwood HAS that power than why won't he use it for himself??? He is a DE and he killed many, tortured a lot of people; now he possess a great power and he hides it from everyone....

    not very convincing but i am damn sure you'll write the reasons behind his actions in the story. please update soon.
     
  10. Amerision

    Amerision Galactic Sheep Emperor DLP Supporter

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    If you had a guilty concscience, serving a monster like Voldemort, and knew two extra unforgivable class spells, would you give it to him?

    Rookwood won't be dying by Harry's hand...he'll be tortured for the info and left for dead.

    Harry will be most likely hunting for his diary, and the hiding place for the spell.

    Something like that.
     
  11. Amerision

    Amerision Galactic Sheep Emperor DLP Supporter

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    Chapter 5 is up.

    Forget anything that I have ever said about this story and disreard all comments above. The plot has changed almost completely.

    It's unlikely that H/Bella, or H/[Insert Object of Wetdream Here] will occur, as I've decided that it would only cause the story to degenerate into a teenage fantasy.

    Some of the other standard Dark!H elements will also be gone, and the story will lose the overly dark atmosphere, only having it when I feel it's needed.

    Some elements of the final battle will be massively cliched, but I've written myself into a corner unless I decide I want a small, private battle between the two.

    Amerision
     
  12. SushiZ

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    Great chapter, I love it. Keep up the great work and update soon.
     
  13. Jon

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    -Lick's his screen.-

    So good. :)
     
  14. digitalstorm

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    That was marvelous.

    5/5
     
  15. DarthBill

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    The story is still marvelous, but I'm a little disappointed that it isn't going to be as dark. Still great though.
     
  16. Bungler

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    A really good chapter and I am looking forward to the next, but I have a question about the freezing of Harry's account. Why didn't anyone do that when Sirius was on the run? He did get Harry a firebolt with money from Gringotts or am I remembering wrong?
     
  17. invisdible

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    An update!

    This story is my favorite of Amerisions stories (Equal and Opposite coming close second) and I really can't find anything to complain about aside from the aeons that pass in between updates.

    Currently 6/5 - will go down once the novelty of having a new chapter wears off :(
     
  18. Dark Lord Rostam

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    Pretty good. I liked it, nice setup for Harry's future plans. Pretty sad that you are scrapping the previous plot work; it was a good plot. Personally, while you do great at group battle scenes, I think that you can do a great private fight between the two of them.
     
  19. Dark Syaoran

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    My review on FFN for the latest chapter. Well done, Amerision. Like I mentioned, I enjoyed it greatly. That 'Rip Rip Jack' reminds me of someone, though I can't figure out who. It's like a mix between a dude in a some movie and one of the bosses in Crash Bandicoot.

    Some interesting spells too. I thought the cage was pretty awesome, too, how it fixes itself. :)
     
  20. Swimdraconian

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    'Rip Rip Jack' is officially my new favourite OC. Your stories make me believe the HP fandom isn't doomed yet.

    I also like the spells; very creative.
     
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