The chapter is quite good, I like the way you characterized him. He is not truely evil but at the same time he is not the abused orphan we expect him to be, he is just a plain ass. I have a question do you plan on pairing Tom with Aurora some day? Or will they stay friends.

 

Extraordinary.

This MAY be the best fic currently in progress. Truly exceptional.

One thing. Sinistra was a Slytherin. (At least as I recall she was)


Anyway, your ideas aren't as "out there" as Jbern's are, but I think you capture the character's in a more accurate way, and your gradual pacing, while still making the story interesting is perfect.

I realized that this may be the best story currently in progress when I noticed I had NO criticisms other than Sinistra.

No flaws with character, believability, plot, interest, etc.

This is frankly better than JK. This is better than HBP and OOTP.


That said, it may also be because no conflict has emerged yet, and we're still getting introduced to Tom as you've written him, so...

But so far he's great. I don't know what plans you have for Tom's first year, but I am VERY excited. 5th Year he releases the serpent.

6th Year Tom tracks down his Uncle Morfin and gets the ring and creates his first Horcrux. 7th Year is plans for his future and avoiding Dumbles (who alluded to trying to catch Tom in the act before he graduated), and building the Diary, his first untraditional Horcrux (Tom released the Serpent 5th Year, but the Diary was made in his 7th according to Canon). It also was the first time Tom broke a major tradition of Magic by making the Horcrux an active object rather than a case.

I BELIEVE Tom found out about his mom being a witch and not his father in 2nd or 3rd Year. Not that hard, considering his mother named before her death.

I guess the first 4 years can be Tom establishing himself as Alpha, because by the end of 4th he was the unofficial head of Slytherin (obvious choice for prefect, and Slugclub leader as seen in Pensieve) and the other 3 years, he established himself as the leader of the School (Headboy.)



I REALLY hope you update soon.

 

Riddle using muggle instrument to kick Gryffindor muggle borns' asses. I love the irony in that. Clever use of the yo-yo.

Not sure where you are exactly taking it, but in Tom's time, it's muggle borns picking on slytherins. Are you reversing the roles as a sign of what LV has done or are you keeping it that Gryffindors are bullies which we don't see from canon. I know you might never get to that point, but I thought it would be interesting to see how you view this issue.

Great job overall. I would be very interested to see more.

 

Now that, I liked; I hope you continue this, have you posted it on FF.net? Dumbledore's likely to blame Tom for the damage to the Gryffs, but this will also lead to Dumbledore's distrust, hence the attitude towards him throughout canon. I also liked how you paraphased some thinks from the books, such as 'what he would spend the next five years searching for', it just seemed to fit.

 

I agree with crazy1

I love the way you make it all come together.


:twisted:

 

Great story so far, I can't wait for the next chapter.

By the way I've read most of all your work in other places like FF or Ficwad, and I can say I liked them.

Keep with the good job.

 

If I give you a nickel, will you update?

 

Great story!
I've always been a bit of a fan of Voldemort and I like how you're developing him. It will be interesting to see how you progress with this.

I also thought the yo-yo part was cool. Imagine how those bullies will react when he eventually comes out as Voldemort.
I wonder if he'd seek revenge considering how he does so at the orphanage.

Can't wait to read more.
Litha

 

While I like all of your other stories very much, I think that this one is my favorite. I don't know if it is just the fact that you have Voldemort as the main character, or what, but this is a fantastic story.

Update soon.

 

I really like this because not only is tom actually believeable but he actually has a sort of friend which dosnt completely cut him off from humanity

 

I like the story premise not many stories I've read are centered on voldemort's rise to power, point for originality(sp?). Like I said, love the story, but please update.

 

I like this story. Tom being beleivable is always good. Tom Riddle isnt always evil its more of along the lines of he doesnt see it as evil. He sees it as the path to power and being respected, feared, and being the best. THats what Tom wants.
If you update Ill give you a prize.

 

You have NO idea how badly I want this to be updated.

One of the best stories in fandom. I see no flaws with it.

5/5