... The dance scene is Snape/Daphne Greengrass's mom. This is disappoint.

That being said, the story seems solidly done, and if it wasn't for the fact that it's well... Snape, I could see continue reading it. Problems I see thus far is James being too one-dimensional and Snape becoming too popular amongst those it counts to be popular with.

The basic framework of the story would work well with Riddle or a darker, more embittered Harry, but Snape has an inherent unpleasantness that means even if he goes back in time and played everyone like a fiddle, he's still greasy git. That means drunken seventh-years (Greengrasses or no) should not be drunkenly coming onto him. This bodes poorly for things to come.

But meh. Even with Snape's character being whitewashed a little too much this story is still many times better than I thought such a story could be.

 

I laughed uproariously. It might be because I am in fact inebriated at the moment, but I found this funny.

Nothing so far for me to give it less than a 4/5. I'll rate it when I'm done reading, though.

 

It feels odd reading a story and not wishing the main character gets the girl.

 

It feels odd seeing DLP support a story that will have Snape preventing our namesake from even being born...

 

It is odd indeed, but good stories are good stories. And despite the fact I know I shouldn't, I love this.

 

Given the main character, I was extremely skeptical of this story. However, the implementation is excellent and won me over.

I eagerly await the next update.

 

Any pairing including snape is gagworthy. I wanted to try and started reading this story. I wasn't able to go on more than a chapter. Can't see Snape becoming something better than James. But I was able to finish the story when I started replacing Snape with Harry in my imagination.

3.5/5

 

I'd read Snape/Fridwulfa if it was written my NMB, and I'd probably rate it 5/5 as well.

 

So harry/lily is better than snape/lily? Oh wait this is DLP, of course.

 

What is the point of that? You can't enjoy non-Harry centric stories?

Anyways, I'm loving this story so far. Snape is really well characterized in this, as is everyone else.

My favorite scene was

Spoiler

Snape sneaking past death eaters killing a muggle lover, rather than trying to stop it because he knew that would just be bringing attention to himself

I wish there was a lot more. I'd probably rate it 5/5 then, but since it's still really early plot wise I'm going to refrain from rating it at all. The pacing is slow but it feels perfect.

 

I completely love this. This is Snape in top form.

I'd recc this to any Harry Potter fan. He really has his phasers set to full snark in this.:awesome

 

This fic inspired me to read some other Snape re-do fics and good god they were all awful.

Just makes me appreciate this story a little more.

 

Yes, yes, good scenes, good LOLs too, Snape actually has a sense of humour, passable view into the politics and society of magical UK '70s, but most importantly; this story breaks Potter Law and thus has to be burned and vanished from the face of the Earth like all the rest of the SS/LE tripe out there.

Spoiler

Having Snape gradually change to appease his new master and new social position is not a loophole in the Law. Snape is Snape and is supposed to stay a bitter ass-hole to make the reader feel better about their life choices.

Having said that; the story has the best Snape I have read in a long time. It is definitely worth reading and the tarnish on your soul after laughing to the Snape humour within.

3/5 because it is singular within the SS/LE pairing, otherwise 1/5 for just that.

And, yes Harry/Lily is way better.

 

I think you haven't read the most important Potter Law. :facepalm

 

4/5 for quality. Some fantastic lines.

 

Well-written, Snape's in-character, Lily is a believable teenager, Jigger is a well-done OC, events unfold naturally and logically...but where's the conflict? It's like I'm reading the life of a completely normal wizard (albeit one who travelled back in time).

It's good and enjoyable, but by this point (meaning where the author left off) we should already see some conflict. All we have is Voldemort lurking in the background, the Muggles being slightly harassed (not even enough to keep them from working in Diagon Alley), and Snape's rivalry with James Potter, which is practically laughable. No obstacles, no challenges. I just hope the author has the sense to kill Cadogan's husband soon or something that pushes Snape out of his comfort zone.

 

Yeah, I agree. The pacing is slow, but its working so far for this fic. I think if the author had thrown in a few battle scenes it would have detracted.

That's why I liked that one scene I mentioned in spoiler tags so much, because it fits Snape so well and is such an un-"Harry Potter" thing. It really made me realize just how overused action scenes are in most stories.

There's nothing wrong with action; but when I'm re-reading stories I find myself skiping over the pointless and randomly added in fight scenes.

Conflict doesn't have to come from spellslinging. Things like Snape having to win over Jigger may not be as exciting as an epic duel, but it's no less enjoyable to me for it.

Sometimes I see comments like "Really wish X and Y had a cool fight scene", but usually what I wish for in fics is "Man, I can't wait to see the conversation where X finds out Y had been hiding _____ from him."

 

Whoever said conflict is about action? A cat stranded on the tallest branch of a tree can be enough conflict if handled well. I don't expect Snape to go wand blazing against Death Eaters--in fact, him staying as far as possible from them is just perfectly in character. But what about the Death Eaters approaching him? A 15 or 16-year-old teenager just set a new record for Potions in NEWT's and was accepted in an apprenticeship under the most noted battle-potions (?) Master in Britain, and yet Voldemort & Co don't approach him?

Of course, things could be happening in the background, things Snape isn't aware of, and, by proxy, we aren't aware of. But if the reader isn't aware of the conflict, there *is* no conflict. I'm just saying the author should throw something out there to break the balance and pull Snape out of his comfortable bubble.

EDIT: The only sort of "plot" we have is Snape's plan to make a potion that can destroy horcruxes, but it seems to be so far into the background that it's hardly important anymore. And while it probably still is important to Snape, it seems there is no real rush. After all, he isn't being targetted by anyone, he is in love, he's getting along with Jigger, publishing potion papers, he's well in the past, with plenty of time before Harry is even born...what's the rush? Dunno. Good story-telling, but it reads more like anecdotes than a novel.

 

I spoke with the author on her Livejournal a little bit. She mentioned this, which seems encouraging.

There's supposed to eventually be 3 parts.