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The Awakening of a Magus by the-dreamer4 - T

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Rahkesh Asmodaeus, Jun 6, 2005.

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  1. Rahkesh Asmodaeus

    Rahkesh Asmodaeus THUNDAH Bawd Admin DLP Supporter

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    Jun 6, 2005 #1
    Title: The Awakening of a Magus
    Author: the-dreamer4
    Rating: T
    Genre: Drama/Fantasy
    Pairing: Unknown
    Summary: PostGoF. Harry: NewPowers,NewLook. But the powers of a Magus aren't so easy to control, and they don't make life easy. Voldemort much stronger. Some:OCs,deaths,NewOutlook. No:Slash,MarySue. LiteShips:Harry-?,R-H,MoreLater. SuperHarryButTryIt
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1091533/1/
     
  2. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Wow... they've been writing this fiction awhile havnt they? 02 to 05.
     
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    Lord Ravenclaw DLP Overlord Admin DLP Supporter

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    Unfortunately I found the later chapters hard to understand and lacking in the quality the earlier chapters did.
     
  4. Rahkesh Asmodaeus

    Rahkesh Asmodaeus THUNDAH Bawd Admin DLP Supporter

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    Jun 7, 2005 #4
    Yes, she took a long hiatus at one point, due to a family crisis.

    lol, yeah, the last few chapters are a little hard to follow, but I still like the story.
     
  5. LT2000

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    I could never get into this story for some reason. I tried to read it, and it just didn't hold my interest. Of course, I'm a bit of a romance pairing junkie, so that probably contributes to the matter.
     
  6. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    its got some parts where it's excellent, yet others where you'd rather jab your eyes out then continue to read some stuff. This is one story I get kind of pissy about because it had so much potential.

    It starts out strong, then about 1/4 of the way through begins to suck, 1/2 the way through picks back up greatly quality wise, then slumps right back down again.


    Overall it's a decent fic, but A)pain in the ass to follow in some parts, B) some parts just get bogged down in tedium for no real reason, C) Harry magus isn't really DOING anything. Yes we get he's LEARNING, but hell have him do SOMETHING ya know? D) see below.

    Harrys basically a GOD and yet, the author writes him , very, very, very mushy. I'm still trying to figure out if when Earamus (spelling i forget) got killed, and the backlash whiped out most of the Magus circle, why the hell would he want to continue it, and leave himself wide open like that?

    I read it sometime in early April, and have been treated to ONE update so far, *shrug* I gave up following fics that didn't update at least 1 every 2 weeks or so. Then again I read too many fics to get attached to ones that are half abandoned =)


    This fic also falls in the problem that it seems the author has decided to make anyone who comes in contact with Harry for a long period of time suddenly become wizards with unique abilities... which in and of itself is annoying (to me)

    It really ruins the uniqueness of Harry's power if any idiot he spends times with can develop them, and even sometime be better then him at them.
     
  7. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    It got up to the chapter where he 'bonds' with Ron and Hermione... lets just say when i saw what Hermione thought about Ron, the 'Maybe something more' bit about their relationship i nearly choked on my tongue.

    I love Harry with almost anyone (Female) and in most of those fics were Harry is with someone else, Hermione and Ron are together.

    BUT i can not stand fluffy shit between Ron and Hermione, it makes me feel ill. I dont know why but it just does. Hermione can be with bloody Dumbledore if she wants to (even thou that is disturbing), Ron and Hermione just dont fit in my mind unless the writer doesnt pay much attention to them.

    eg. Azkaban!Harry fics have them paired up all the time but the story doesnt pay attention to their love life which is good, very good.

    Soon as the fluffy enters, i want to lose my breakfast, lunch and dinner all over the keyboard.
     
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    Jun 7, 2005 #8
    Never truer words spoken. Don't forget about snacks too.
     
  9. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Jun 8, 2005 #9


    *gouges self to death with a fork*


    WORST MENTAL IMAGE









    EVER
     
  10. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    MUAHAHAHAHAHAHA!@#~

    I live to plant the image of disturbed things in peoples minds. Mission 1: Infect Midnight was successful! :p
     
  11. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    You just wait, my Hermione/Fluffy scene will twist your stomache (Not in a birds and the bees way either)
     
  12. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Hermione/Ron fluffy scene?

    Now thats just plain..... EVIL!

    I might throw-up my heart or something... wouldnt want that.
     
  13. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Naw it's not disgusting, just graphic, lol.
     
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    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    i liked this story for a while.. then i got around half way.. and just.. blah... last interest..
     
  15. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Aye, I'm sticking with it in hopes that he has Harry do... um.. something other then sitting there not really doing um.. anything.
     
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    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    lol.

    Maybe he should become a Man-Whore and start pimpin Hogwarts.
     
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    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    At this point in the story I'd settle for him becoming gay, and doing "Queer eye for the Hogwarts guy" instead of nothing to be honest
     
  18. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    LOL.

    How trippy would that be. Walking around telling everyone their robes suck and start dressing them in new ones while making his voice all high pitched. He'd probably try and get 'Sevie' to wash his hair. :D
     
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    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Harry: Oh no girlfriend, the vampire look is so... ug, last season.

    Sev: ....

    Harry: We've got to turn you from drab to fab!

    Sev: .... please kill me now.

    Harry: oh hush sweet thang!

    *Severus drinks random bottles of potion ingrediants, turns into a gay vampire.*

    Sev: Damnit.
     
  20. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Stories been updated, and thank jebus, sallah, etc that there some freaking ACTION in it.

    Granted... you get to sit through a great majority of the chapter bored, but if you skip to the end it's good.
     
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