The writing is solid, better than some stuff I've seen getting praised, no denying that. The problem is, though, that all the story is is gratuitous tearjerking and I'm not sure on your portrayal of Dudley, even keeping in mind the Dementor thing having shaken him up.

I rate 1/5 for being a weirdo-Dudley-centric angst fic about what a great person Harry was. In my experience, Dursleys seeing him in a whole new light as they are given a 'tour' of his selfless sacrifices is always cheap and never ends well, for future reference. Sorry, but not dlp material.

P.S. What the hell Gilmore Girls fanfiction.

 

Oh, I lurked with the best of them for ages before even thinking of piping up Also, while I am nowhere near 'qualified' for a final word on fics, anyone with a sense for the community can tell when something just isn't suited.