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Abandoned The Chimera: More Snake than Lion by apocalypso - M

Discussion in 'General Fics' started by Zero, Mar 13, 2006.

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  1. Yarrgh!

    Yarrgh! Pirate King

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    Cheers, man. What about your fic? I ahven't seen an update for 'The Power' in over a month. It was damn good...i'm pretty sure i reviewed. Writer's block?
     
  2. DarthBill

    DarthBill The Chosen One DLP Supporter

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    Yeah. I've got the whole Basilisk fight planned out, but I'm having a hard time with the chapter that is supposed to come before that.
     
  3. TheIllusiveOne

    TheIllusiveOne Raptured to Hell

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    Can someone decode this?
     
  4. Lord Necros

    Lord Necros Slug Club Member

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    what I am saying is cut the cliche head of gryffndor or any other house except for the ones he has said in the story but maybe add the house of le fey leading to slytherin?
     
  5. Yarrgh!

    Yarrgh! Pirate King

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    Err...he is Lord of Potter and Black. He is Head of House of the Crowen Family, but they don't have a lordship...they were just a small family. He IS Lord of Slytherin, but he can't go about telling people that. Only some families can know, and that too, under an oath of silence.

    Necros...there will NOT be any Merlin/Morgana Le Fay bullshit.

    EDIT: Just to make it doubly clear, Potter is NOT the same as Gryffindor or anything. It's an entirely separate family.
     
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  6. Lord Necros

    Lord Necros Slug Club Member

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    thank god no grffndork shit and the le fay idea would have been nice but se la vey
     
  7. Ryuu Ken

    Ryuu Ken Second Year

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    You mean c'est la vie, don't you?
     
  8. Yarrgh!

    Yarrgh! Pirate King

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    ROFL...the le fay idea has been used to death already. Too many fics have him the heir to Le Fay, Merlin, Queen Mab and Dracula and shit.

    se la vey...Rofl. It took a few stares to understand what the hell that meant. I'm used to having to decode you in english, so the French threw me off. :p j/k
     
  9. cu_cullen9

    cu_cullen9 Second Year

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    You know who i think harry should be related to just for shits and giggles? Ron Jeremy.
     
  10. Yarrgh!

    Yarrgh! Pirate King

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    rofl...perhaps in my other fic, cu_cullen...it would fit the mood better
     
  11. cu_cullen9

    cu_cullen9 Second Year

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    hey i just give strange and comments from out of nowhere. you can use them how you want. I rember one time i was pretty wasted in korea an i kept shouting 'peaches' for some reason.
     
  12. Lord Necros

    Lord Necros Slug Club Member

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    No that old porn star somethiing Holmes
     
  13. Yarrgh!

    Yarrgh! Pirate King

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    Well...i thought i'd hand out an update soon :p

    I'm almost done with it, and i'll probably send it out tomorrow morning to Zero. If cj_cold and IP82 don't mind helping, then i might be able to get some help from them too. I hope to have the update out in about 4-5 days at most.

    I have to apologize...i promised quicker updates during the summer, and it didn't happen. I didn't even realize it had been a month until yesterday or so, when BlueMagicMarker mentioned something about having only two days left till he was supposed to update. So sorry, and i'll make things faster. Erm...i don't know if i can maintain these 9000 words+ chapters, so tentatively, i'll say that chapters from now on will be only about 7500 words or so.

    Plus, i'm nearly grinning from ear to ear, as from the next chapter, shit starts getting into gear. This is the part that i wanted to write all along. Next chapter (Chapter 7) should see the Maturation happening, as well as the start of some magical theory and some political planning. And this chapter, Chapter 6, starts off the Harry/Tonks, too, so that's great as well...regardless of how hard certain parts are to write >_<

    Wheee!

    I love the new Restricted Section...bumps don't really matter! :p
     
  14. Lord Apophis

    Lord Apophis Professor

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    This is easily among the best stories currently active, Keep up the good work. Will Dumbledore discover that harry knows of his manipulations when harry manage to stop him from placing magical blocks on his core again after the maturing?
     
  15. LINKed up

    LINKed up Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    Awesome fic Yarrgh. I can't wait until the next update. That little piece with Tonks at the end of the fifth chapter was a nice tough :).
     
  16. Lord Ravenclaw

    Lord Ravenclaw DLP Overlord Admin DLP Supporter

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    Well done! I realized I did read this...I was just so tired at the time that I could only vaguely remember it.
     
  17. Raijin

    Raijin Slug Club Member

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    Glad you've updated. I enjoyed the marriage neogtioations and the look into Voldemort's head. Though the Harry/Tonks part seemed kinda strange with her seducing him not exactly sure why though.
     
    Last edited: Jun 21, 2006
  18. Mr. Merriman

    Mr. Merriman Groundskeeper

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    Excellent chapter. I really do like this story more with every update. Quite interesting to see the betrothal negotiations, as well as a great example of Dumbledore being outmanuevered without suddenly turning into a senile old codger. The characterization of Voldemort was excellent, and I particularly enjoyed the insight into his thought processes and motives.
     
  19. Lord Apophis

    Lord Apophis Professor

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    Great chapter. I like how Voldemort is written, how it shows that his mind was corrupted by not performing the cleansing rituals and for once so are snakes not as intelligent as humans. It was also great that harry disabled fawkes before he disappered so that he would not be found.

    One thing that I think should be diffrent is Tonks seduction of harry after the betrothal to cho. Instead of Tonks waiting until after harry's betrothal so could she have done it before.

    This story just gets better with each update.
     
  20. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    Well, seeing how you already know my general objections, I'll just say that everything seems fine now, from Chang's characterisation, to Tonks'... methods. Few parts seemed a bit rough (the parts where you attached corrections to the original draft), but I doubt many ppl would notice.

    So, great chapter in general. Strong EE / weak O.
     
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