I think there should be some sort of betaing competition between Warlocke and Oz. Marked on speed, accuracy, the number of different colours they can use, and humour.

 

Maybe we should ask the writers and see who they prefer.

 

Fix'd

Awesome chapter as always, Shezza. I'm liking Amaris more and more with each chapter.

 

Yes, she is rather fun. I seem to be imagining her much older than she is though, possibly due to her language/attitude. For some reason my mental image of her is River from Firefly.

 

Once more you prove yourself to be a brilliant writer Shezza! So far the chapter is really great and fun.

I thought the interactions between Harry and Amaris were once again brilliant. It showed Harry sorta bonding with Amaris, but in a way that was as far from "lovey-doey" as possible. I thought that the discussions between the two were great. I found the whole "look behind you" thing hilarious and when Amaris calmly and seriously calls Harry a git I could not help but laugh. The whole nibbling Harry's ear was also amusing.

I wonder if choosing a side is actually 100% necessary. I mean why could Amaris not stay as half-human/half-faery and gain the benefits of both. I don't think this has been said in the Dresden Files so I guess it is up to you to decide if the transformation is compulsory. Would she still consider Harry her father if she were to choose her sidhe side? After all the time you are spending on her character I dont really want her to just decide that Harry is irrelevant and leave her humanity behind, but I also don't want her to become your boring average human. I suppose time will tell what you are planning.

So who was the slytherin that Harry tormented and are we going to see him again? He did not seem entirely smart with the way he talked back to Harry. Is Snape going to come after Harry for that? It has been quite some time since we last saw Snape and I would love to see how Amaris will react to him. You do Snape-bashing so very well afterall.

Anyway loved it all. I am also looking forward to the DA scene. Please hurry with it!

PS. Did I understand that Amaris does not wear shoes but actually goes everywhere bare footed? Wtf?

 

Rofl.

So, creationism eh?

 

I don't know why everyone is bothering to argue over this. The universe was made when the God-Chaos accidentally exploded the Flan he was baking. It has all just gone down-hill from there...for several million years.

 

Aarrgh!, just fucking stop! The other thread was locked for a reason...bullshit.

 

Its changelings!

And I don't think it is said anywhere that they have to choose during war. I just checked. There is one section where it is said that "Winter is calling" but it is implied that it is upto the changeling to choose to answer or not.

Ofcourse Shezza is not in any way bound to follow DF-canon so he can decide what is best for this story. And anyway Amaris is hardly your average changeling.

Oh, and if Amaris really does walk everywhere bare footed then why is it that no one comments on it? The floor is probably cold so you would think walking around without shoes or even socks would attract a lot of attention?

 

It's the Wildfae that have to choose in wartime, IIRC.

 

Yeah maybe, I just thought it odd since Harry specifially said that Amaris should not act like a bitch since it made it hard for her to stay incognito by causing everyone to gossip about it. But going barefoot without complaint in a castle that probably has cold stone floors would probably cause far more gossip.

And for that matter if people were upset when Amaris slept on the floor then why dont they care that she is gallivating around without shoes.

I suppose the dress example might explain it though. However Harry could apparently hear that she had no shoes from the sound that her feet made so why cannot others? For that matter what exactly is Amaris wearing anyway?

Here are the critical parts I could find in Summer Knight for anyone who might find the changeling concept interesting:

EDIT:

Ok. This is unrelated to the stuff above.

For a moment there I thougt that Shezza would have managed a chapter without me needing to nitpick it overly much, however all I needed to do was gather my thoughts a bit.

A) You call Meciel a Denarian here. But I thought the denarians were the humans that had a fallen inside their heads. So Harry would be the denarian while Meciel is actually a fallen.

B) You say that Amaris has used Maeve's scrying mirror to spy on Harry. But he has spent most of his time in Hogwarts right? And Maeve cannot see inside Hogwarts due to the wards and Fawkes as was said in DR 19. I suppose Amaris could have spied on Harry when he was not in Hogwarts but I got the impression that he spent most of his time alone. So unless there has been a lot of offscreen action for Harry, Amaris should not have this kind of detailed view of him.

 

Amaris isn't as annoying as I thought she'd be.

Harry however is pissing me off more and more. His immaturity, while fun, is just becoming a hindrance to him, and an annoyance to me. You can still be funny, hurt people, and destroy people's sense of self worth, while being mature.

This version of Harry could have been written by an incredibly talented 10 year old with a penchant for swearing and self insertion into the story.

It's basically getting old, correction, it was getting old by the end of Renegade, now it's plain old fucking irritating.

EDIT: I mean no disrespect towards you or your writing style with this. This is honest critique from a person who's read the whole story up to this point, and is honestly getting fed up with reading a supercharged 10 year old.

 

The Order of the Blackened Denarius encompasses both the Fallen and the hosts, because they are named after the thirty silver coins. It's like a select grouping of the Fallen given a different name because there only thirty Fallen in the mortal realm while there are many more in the Outside. Think of the Fallen like the species and the Denarians like the nationality.

Aekiel

 

B) You say that Amaris has used Maeve's scrying mirror to spy on Harry. But he has spent most of his time in Hogwarts right? And Maeve cannot see inside Hogwarts due to the wards and Fawkes as was said in DR 19. I suppose Amaris could have spied on Harry when he was not in Hogwarts but I got the impression that he spent most of his time alone. So unless there has been a lot of offscreen action for Harry, Amaris should not have this kind of detailed view of him.[/QUOTE]




Well maybe Amaris can see with the mirror because she is half human and that side interfere with the summer fae magic letting her see what happen in there.../You can can correct me if im wrong I mostly don't care.