The mysterious Nobody: 'Entertaining' is the best I'd hope for a fic. This was FAR from entertaining.

The author doesn't live up to what he wanted to write (Harry, with a Slytherin Girl.... amongst other things mentioned already) which makes this a bad fic. If I wanted to read cliche romance I would goto that shit H/G site I can't even remember the name of.

1/5.

P.S. Is it just me.... or is that a white girl in Heathers sig?

 

I thought the third chapter was better than the second, but it is just another average fan fic.

 

Is it just me who isn't getting mail from FFN?

I personally found the newest update pretty entertaining, then again HP/DG hunger pains can make almost anything taste good.

 

The third chapter was far superior to the first two in every way. Daphne is starting to become an actual character. And it was like HBP redux with people not being retarded. Maybe I can block out memories of the actual book with this.

 

I think I can throw my voice of agreement here as well - this latest chapter was many times better than the first two combined. Finally, things happen that are actually somewhat interesting. Now I'm actually curious as to how things might proceed, whereas before I was just casually interested.

-J

 

I always enjoy Harry/Daphne so that gives it at least a 3 in my book. The writing quality is decent and the story is starting to improve so I'll say 4/5 for now.

 

I'm getting mail from FFN about some stories but not others.

Anyway... already been said before but the first two chapters feel rushed and the third chapter is superior. Overall I give this fic a 3.5/5

 

This is the definition of a guilty pleasure fic. 4/5

 

Well it is all over now, nice ending, a bit to fast paced, but heck the price is right. 3/5 for ron bashing.

 

Fuck, he beats Voldemort by stunning him and forcing him to drink a potion. Fail.

 

Good, well written fic. But has a rather stupid Dumbledore (that the headmaster had no way stop Harry from getting his way is really silly) and apparently, if he falls for the plan, Voldie. But still a decent read for a lazy afternoon.

Score: 3/5

 

Not every defeat has to be a climatic bout of magical prowess.

Personally I found the final chapter to be a little patchy. Some parts were good, some parts were amongst the worst of the fic to date. I didn't mind the lack of a overblown finale, a nice change, though it was a tad easy for Harry to accomplish everything. Had it been more fleshed out, I wouldn't mind it one bit. As is, it is okay - nothing special, but not pathetic.

Again, I maintain my earlier comments. 3/5 overall. It had its moments.

 

Wow... thing is, even if this deserves - and I use that term loosley, as it means it actually worked for it - one star, it's still better than the fail concentrate one hits by searching 'greengrass' and then ordering by update time at ffnet.

The Grass is always Greener
New Destiny
The New Dark Lord
The Grey Prince of Slytherin

4 HP/DG, all of which have been updated in the past two weeks, and I'm hardpressed to say which is worse (though I'm going with Grey Prince because of the title). I'd review them for you, but it would be less painful to just nail my dick to a wall.

 

That 4th Chapter was pretty terrible. I'm all for HP/DG and whatnot. But wow, that was just a downward spiral of stupidity in that chapter.

And the first three weren't that great to begin with. So heh.

Definitely a 2/5, if only for the technical side of the story and having some decent ideas that just weren't thought out or executed properly. If the author were to stumble across this review thread, I'd encourage him to try a bit harder. He has quite a bit of potential. He needs to cut down on the Nora Roberts bullshit romance and find a balance in storytelling.

This is what so many authors fall into, really. From your jberns to your BJHs and so on. The idea that the main character has to be smug, "Slytherin" or both and to continue the incompetence of the Death Eaters to a level even Rowling might pick up on with time.

It's a recipe for a story that's average. And that's what this is. An average story - one that will receive an average amount of reviews, a decent following and a few C2 listings and what-not. But DLP scales differently and so this story is more or less a failure.

So 2/5.

And Vlad: I thought that said Gay Prince of Slytherin, rofl. Which sounds more in line with what I've become accustomed to finding at FF.net.

 

I don't think the smugness is quite the reason this story failed to deliver. There's a rich tradition of smug protagonists in stories that do work: Essentially everything by Heinlein, Harry Harrison's Stainless Steel Rat, Hiro Protagonist in Stephenson's Snow Crash, etc. It's that none of the characters in this story had any growth and that reading romance between static characters is boring when nothing else interesting (e.g. a mystery, action sequences, collapse of a dystopia, attack by Nazi Tyrannosaurs, etc.) is going on.

He definitely should have included more Nazi Tyrannosaurs.

Edit: I voted 3/5, but consider it on the low side of 3. Not library worthy.

 

Smugness is but one part of the equation. If you read the rest of the sentence, there's the additional requirement of incompetence from the antagonist. Smugness is perfectly acceptable from either, though is more often found in the latter unless we're discussing anti-heroes.

When you have a smug cunt running around beating up on cripple-like antagonists, it doesn't work. But then you view Holmes and Moriarty, who were both over-confident and it works.

I believe it all stems from one essential issue: pretending the protagonist is you. Why else would you see fics where the protagonist has a harem and talks down to well-respected betters? Or runs around acting like a complete dipshit?

It's pretentious of course, but w/e.

 

It had potential. Then the author fucked it up. The 4th chapter seemed like a total cop out, and a poorly written one at that. I have to change my opinion to a 2/5 - Not Library Worthy.

 

I somewhat enjoyed it from chapters 1-3, but the 4th just ruined it. 2/5

 

I find it funny that most people on this site are utterly unable to stand romance...

Anyways, I stand by my 3.5/5 statement. The romance was good, and I thought the way he dealt with Voldemort was interesting. 3.5, for me, means a little above average, but nothing to particularly write home about.

As I think the author said, she didn't try as hard as she could have when writing this fic.