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WIP The Havoc Side of the Force by Tsu Doh Nimh - T - HP/Star Wars

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by Hw597, Oct 9, 2012.

  1. Jon

    Jon The Demon Mayor Admin DLP Supporter

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    Fun cameo from the Clone Wars tv series with Sinube.

    I didn't... really enjoy this chapter. It was passable, but not enjoyable. Gonna need to reread to gather my thoughts but from the first pass:


    • Too much focus on z0mg teh money
    • Another Shmi being overwhelmed due to money scene
    • Dumb fixation on 'time is money'
    • Anakin prank hurdur
     
  2. Odran

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    Not much of development, but then again you can't have action in every single chapter, it's nice to unwind and relax (somewhat) the protagonist and his companions.

    That said, this chapter reminds me a little too much of ABC and I'm no fan of that particular fanfic.
     
  3. Manavz

    Manavz Second Year

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    Personally, I enjoyed the chapter. Harry has been rolling through everyone so far, so it was nice to see that he can't destroy everything. Also reinforced his more mercenary attitude with mixtures of morality.
     
  4. Peter North

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    Best new year's gift we could have gotten. I can't wait to read about the reaction to his howler to the queen. Anyone remember when the previous update was? Maybe the next release will come sooner.
     
  5. Jarik

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    Don't think Harry should have gotten away with so much money. To start with, its ridiculous that that much money can so easily move around. But it just makes everything feel too easy now.
     
  6. Longsword

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    The chapter was good at clearing some of the questions related to the Jedi Council, but it would have been better if all the money laundering and loot related things would have been
    not posted all in a few chapters.
     
  7. Republic

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    Can someone explain to me what exactly happened with Bellatrix in the last side-chapter? I think she has another soul in her body or something?

    I was mostly skipping that part :/
     
  8. Manavz

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    Spoilers (Not sure how to do a correct spoiler tag)

    Bellatrix had created a horcrux, and like Voldemort, possessed Millicent. Unlike Voldemort, Belatrix can fully control Millicent but Millicent's soul is still in there. When Palpatine drugged her, it only affected Millicent's soul, so Belatrix tried to make her escape. Unfortunately, the planet she was on wasn't suitable for human conditions and she was recaptured.

    Spoiler
     
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  9. Republic

    Republic The Snow Queen –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    You can type [spoiler.] text goes here [/spoiler.] without the full stops for tags.

    Also, thanks.
     
  10. Ched

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    I'd.... completely forgotten that bit about Milicent. Even having been told about it, I only barely remember something along those lines, but it does explain that recent bit about the poisoned atmosphere. Thanks dude. For some reason I was thinking that a bit of LV was stuck in her, but your explanation cleared things up.
     
  11. AAnimedude

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    I love this story, I just wish that it wouldn't update at such a glacial pace.
     
  12. Spanks

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    Aw man, someone needs to write a SW/HP fic with Voldemort instead of Harry. He'd certainly fit in with the non humans with his looks.
     
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    I laughed at the 'this is a bribe' bit.
     
  15. Republic

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    This updated. Enjoyable update, I'll have to say. Some satisfying moments, and I'm glad to see that the enmity against the Jedi is fading.
     
  16. EinStern

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    ... Is it really taking your secret to the grave if you've obliviated yourself of it beforehand?
     
  17. Ched

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    Awesome chapter.

    I gotta admit, if nothing else, every update in this story seems to have things happen.
     
  18. Peter North

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    It was a good chapter. However the way the author seemed to harp on Gardulla even after Harry killed him seemed a bit excessive.
     
  19. Gengar

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    The whole story so far seems an exercise in 'excess', and while I'd normally find that annoying, I think it's part of the charm.
     
  20. DerHesse

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    The story is incredibly entertaining to read. This Harry is awesome. I can't wait for the appearance of Millicent/Bellatrix and how it's going to affect his rather carefree attitude.
     
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