I second the statement above. At the moment I think the development isn't that unrealistic.

The part that I liked the most was Harry becoming the manipulating puppeteer pulling the strings for the greater good. Even if 'the greater good' was mentioned almost too often, it was well done how he had to convince himself to continue.

5/5

 

Almost like a taunt at Dumbledore's character with "for the greater good this, or that." I liked how it was done though.

 

That story was greatness at its greatest, pure 5/5 for that one man!
My thoughts on continuance are: either leave it as a one-shot or do a complete re-write with only the bare essentials, one change any aspiring story writer might want to consider would be to make gin-sluts death "much" gorier though...*grin*.

 

I loved the premise. Wizards and muggles as evolutionary competitors is intriguing. And the open ended nature works well.

4/5

 

What killed it before I even read it was that it was post DH...having given up after hearing about HBP and its crappiness...would never read a post BHP or DH ever....crappy ending...have read fanfiction that was 100 times better.

 

Dude don't necro-post or you'll get your ass beat on this site, if the threads a month old like this one is dont bother.

 

a picknitter..under the faq, a necro post is a post over a month after the last post..and after checking..I am 3 days over a month (average of 30 days)...wow........and if they want to beat my ass..well..not into s&m myself...

 

Library threads are fine to post in, even old ones. If you have something of interest to post.

You didn't.