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WIP The Red Knight by Demon Eyes Laharl -T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by nevu, Jan 7, 2017.

  1. TheLazyReader

    TheLazyReader Groundskeeper

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    Makes sense, but does it have to be delivered in such a... mechanical way? Also, the revelation that he's from another dimension was taken too easily. Like, what, someone just says they're from another dimension and you go "yeah, makes sense"? Specially when you've never addressed multiple dimensions are in the knowledge of the characters. And why didn't Violet want to discuss Harry? Another version of you with a different gender seems like something you'd like to know about.
     
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