Title: The Reign of Darkness
Author: HoshiHikari4ever
Rating: T(PG-13)
Summary: Takes place after the OOTP. Voldemort had a son, that he never knew about, until recently. Only problem is, his son is the cause of his downfall.. Harry Potter. How will he react? How will Harry react when he finds out? On top of it all Dumbledore had been keeping secrets from Harry..
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3595303/1/The_Reign_of_Darkness

 

I reviewed this a couple times when it was being written. I'm a bit partial to it because it's Dark!Harry and Harry/Cho, but the story is nothing earth-shattering. The writing has its share of mistakes and the language isn't great, but I'd still recommend this as a decent way to kill a few hours. It also pulls some really unrealistic shit with the Marauders having been appended by Riddle and Snape to make a sextet, neglecting that they hated Snape in canon and Tom was long since gone from Hogwarts when the MWPP generation was there.

 

I didn't mind this fic...Aside from the unrealisticness of the marauders+snape+voldie, it was pretty good. I liked it.

 

Er.. well, it's a nice idea (though not exactly a new one) but the execution... so many problems.
In the first chapter, Harry just ups and randomly kills the Dursleys (ok) and poor old Mrs Figg with not even a second look.
In the first chapter, Voldemort tells Nagini that he only found out about Harry being his son a month before. In the second chapter, he says that he knew all along.
According to Voldemort, he was in school with the marauders. Now, the idea that he was friendly with them and had sex with Lily is one thing - but making him 30 years younger than he really is kills CoS just like that.

Then this scene at the end of chapter 2 - and this is where I stopped reading (and it wasn't because Voldemort managed to clap one-handed):


"Tha-Thank You….but I'm still not sure if I believe you."

"Well you know what happened the last five years. Only three things to explain." Voldemort clapped his hand. The words Harry James Potter shone down on them. "This is who you are or who you think." He waved his hand. The letters rearranged itself to form the name Thomas Jerry Reapt Riddle. Harry's mouth fell open. "You see, you are my son." Harry was speechless.


Speechless because that scene was completely meaningless? When the author read CoS, did he/she, in addition to not realising (despite it being explicitly stated) that the original incident happened '50 years ago', that the reason the name rearranging scene in the Chamber has any significance at all is that I Am Lord Voldemort is an anagram of Tom Marvolo Riddle?
Perhaps the scene would work better like this:

"Tha-Thank You….but I'm still not sure if I believe you."

"Well you know what happened the last five years. Only three things to explain." Voldemort clapped his hand. The words Harry James Potter shone down on them. "This is who you are or who you think." He waved his hand. The letters rearranged itself to form the name Albus Frederick Alan Dumbledore. Harry's mouth fell open. "You see, you are my son." Harry was speechless. Voldemort looke up at the glowing letters. "Oh, fuck."

"Dumbledore is my father?" Harry choked out. He slammed his fist down on the table, knocking the plate of cookies to the floor. "Damn you Dumbledore, how could you leave me with the Dursleys when you had a duty of care towards me?" Harry's eyes glowed green with power. He looked up at Voldemort, who was waving his wand frantically at the letters, which kept switching through various names. "Thank you, Tom, I don't know how I can ever repay you. Well, I have to go make up with my dad now, see you around." Harry apparated away with a crack.

Derek Rodney Weasley, Jiang Mao Chang, the letters finally settled on Thomas Jerry Reapt Riddle, and Voldemort smiled in relief, setting down his wand. "There we go," he said. "Tricky thing, magic." He looked around the empty room. "Harry, son? Where are you?"

 

i must say that, that was just plain shit. no effance but your way better writer than me anyday, just need to work on it a bit more.

 

ROFL! That was great, could be cool one-shot.

 

@ Tinder...Great, love the analysis! Yes, the whole letter thing is a bit screwy, but yeah, agree with IP, you should do a one-shot!

 

OK. Not only is this fic written in a way that makes my cat look like a Professor of English Literature at Oxford, but it completely abandons both cannon and, shockingly, logic.

Here is a fic that starts off with the main character (who incidentally happens to have a huge amount of warm fuzzy light-wizard goodness cannon behind him) commiting acts of murder at almost no provocation while IN THE SAME MOMENT trusting the servant of his arch enemy. Forgive me for snorting in derrision and then composing a scathing review.

Next, he goes to meet with Voldemort, who suddenly seems capable of love, who seemed to have entered stasis for fifty years and then having the gaul to tell his son about all the sex he had with his mother (Ewwww.... Can you say 'BAD PARENTING'?). After that, he says that Dumbledore used him as a bargaining chip. Then he says that he only knew about his son a month before (but didn't do anything about it?), and then says that Lily told him (AT HER WEDDING. Now, can you say 'Unfaithful!' while looking pointedly in James's direction???), so he MUST have known for at least 17 years, but also only for a month....

Don't get me started on his name. I will merely say that Jerry is not fit for any self respecting human, and that this so called anogram (sp?) has way too many extra letters (1 A, E, I, and T, and would someone PLEASE tell me where there are 2 D's and 2 L's in 'Harry James Potter'?????).

We then proceed to skip two months entirely, which could have been well used.

And Voldmeort is too cudly. And the new Mark sucks. And the writing is terrible. And it needs to be rewritten by someone compitent. Etc.

And that was only the first three chapters.

Overall, this fic gets a(n).............. F!
And............................................ Certainly NO Academy Award...


Reccomendation? Don't read it. It's a complete waste of your time. And did I mention it was crap........

 

hello,
i am new to this group (reading HP Fanfic since 4-5 years).
so i was just jumping to some of the stories....and alas i wound this one.
sorry to say (nay not sorry) i quit after 2 chapters....its absolut unlogic (see above for some mistakes).

 

Jeez, I'm not even going to read it if the idiot managed to mess up the freaking anagram of all things...

 

Wow... yeah... hmmm... middle of chapter 2... Lily and Voldie... yeah... even before HBP... we all knew Voldemort was old... yeah... Lily and Voldie... yeah... er... no...

NO!!!!

GET ME MY SPORK!!!

 

Yawn...plots been done to death, not a great story but its not bad.

 

Author removed and rewrote the fic. Above url is broken. Here's one that works: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3595303/1/The_Reign_of_Darkness

I have both the rewrite and the original in the archive if anyone's into that kind of thing. Also, given the low rating, perhaps this fic's acceptance in the Library should be re-evaluated? Just saying...

--bornagainpenguin

 

Not gonna read it. I am tired of seeing Alt!Harry fics where his parents are not his parents. He is the son of James and Lily. Suck it up... okay there are a few good fics out there so I even though I am not gonna read it, if you can stand Harry-not-the-son-of-J/L, you have my best wishes of enjoying this.

 

You misspelled 'true'.

 

A 3.5 year necro saying you are not going to read it? Congratulations. This probably could be removed, as you can tell from the comments its not going to be good.

 

LOL

You win, sir