Gives a whole new meaning to "Reach out and touch someone".

I enjoyed it, even if the writing was fairly average. 4/5 rounded up.

 

I think I will bump my rating up to 2.5/5 for the simple fact that the author didn't have Harry using a Barett M82 like every other author in this fandom does when writing a scene involving a sniper.

 

Has anyone heard of the Accuracy International AS50? I think that's what it's called. It's a semi-automatic 50cal sniper rifle that's almost as accurate as a bolt-action one.

 

So wat if it's almost as accurate sniper rifle... i doubt many people on this site will need to know that fact as they decide which rifle to bunk out to attack a military leader of a coup in the near future.

Other then that is was a pretty decent oneshot, belaying the fact that I don't really read oneshots and that I don't read many stories that have him using Muggle means to take out Voldemort...but meh, 4.3/5 easily from me.

 

I didn't like Harry taking Cedric's name. I didn't like the trial scene- but I've been permanently spoiled by empink's story. I liked some of the Harry/Sirius interaction. I've always liked sniper stories, so the idea was excellent.

The writing was average, but some mispunctuations really killed the flow of the dialogue.

All in all, an average fic. 2.5/5, and perhaps another half-point for the first-person-narration.

 

Excellent story,really liked Harry's characterisation, and how the author dealt with the situation overall. Not perfect by any means though, but the priceless Draco bashing at the end causes me to give this story a 5/5. A good candidate for the Library.

 

It was good overall, some unessacary elements for a one shot. but good overall four out of five, for unnessacary elements.

 

You only have a "fight/flight" reaction to something you know to fear, and JKR pretty much spelled out that most of the wizarding community are made up of ignorant jackasses that don't have clue one about what muggles are capable of... much less what their technology is capable of.

To them they'd hear a clapping noise and see people falling down. Only those really close would see the full effects of the shots, and on top of that you have crowd noise muffling what people in the center of the to-do hear.

Furthermore, how many rounds do you think are in a sniper rifle? They're large caliber rounds you know... the m40a3 has a 5 round clip by way of example. They aren't some 20 or 30 round clip sort of weapon.

So saying he unloaded 10 rounds is well within the realm of possibility.

 

Garret is correct for the most part there are exceptions of course like with all things, but most sniper rifles do only lower capacity mags, as he stated because they are typically of larger calibers, there is a sniper rifle variant of an assault rifle which carries about one hundred rounds, albeit its a box mag, so that doesn't really count.
By the way I forget from what distance was Harry shooting, if he was far enough a way the sound would not have been heard.

 

Technically Helltanz that's incorrect. If he was taking the shot at 800 yards then the impact would occur before the shot was heard due to the bullet traveling a supersonic speeds. The delay would simply increase at a longer range, but it would still be heard.

 

Thanks

My mistake, thanks for the correction.
By the way was 800m how far of a distance he was shooting?

 

Awesome oneshot! You don't see many muggle military Harry's. Tho only criticism is that the death eaters took too long and seemed too dumb to react to the kills.
4.5/5

 

According to the story the shots were taken a approx. 750 yards

 

The story was O.K. I like how even though he is trying to escape his past, he was still given the nickname 'Potter' because of his weapon skills. Quite funny.

 

I'm kinda a sucker for the entire soldier!Harry theme. I'll give this one a 3.5/5. It was a good way to pass the time and certainly a good oneshot. However, as a couple of you have previously mentioned there are areas that are pointless (i.e. wandless magic) that are focused on to the areas that could be fleshed out a bit more (such as Harry getting into shenanigans during his army career).

Overall a fun read, but I don't know if it belongs in the library.

 

2/5

Average all around, then a reconciliation with his friends that came out of nowhere. Good mechanics though. My inner Grammar-Nazi was pleased.

 

I read the story and I'll be blunt, it could have been better but at least you didn't completely dismantle the interesting plot. Seeing as its a one-shot I'll cut some slack.

1 point for average or above grammar usage, if the story lacked that automatic fail in my book. I don't care if the idea was the most revolutionary, Harry Potter world changing, 'oh my god I'll bow down to your creativity' thing that any person has created so far. If I can't read it well enough to get a nice feel of the story, the whole thing means bull to me.

First Sniper!Harry I've read and it entertained me for a couple minutes so another 1 point for the interest factor. The fact that it seems like a Indy!Harry fic makes me more inclined to give a more positive view on it. Draco bashing- okay expected that. Harry killing Voldemort- also expected.

That's it for the positive stuff. On the down side, is this one of those stories where Harry is going to prove how superior muggle tech is compared to magic? I got that subtle feeling with the gun. I'm more on the lines of both have pros and cons but even out somehow. If I misread it, my bad, won't count that against the story. Then the attitude change of Harry at the end, I felt like he did a complete 180 and became something close to forgive&forget!Harry. Its nice it ended on a well note but I though it could have had a bad-ass ending or something and yet it left a sort of bad taste in mouth after reading that scene, that's just me though. If this isn't enough to explain my frustrations with the story, I don't know what will. It could be that I'm just over-analyzing this and making no sense or I'm tired and can't think straight.

[I'd give it a 2.5/5] I like Indy!Harry and the idea is worth mentioning, but the way in which it was taken just couldn't give me enough reason to give it any higher score.

 

I actually enjoyed this story quite a bit. It managed to avoid many of the Independent!Harry clichés, but still had him running away to live in the Muggle world. And really, where else would a kid who was raised pretty much isolated from both worlds go? While it might not be absolutely realistic, I still enjoyed it immensely. And, well, it's rare that we see Voldemort and the Death Eaters killed off with regular old bullets. (I still think 'Accio Voldemort's lungs' would be an interesting way to kill him, but snipers and explosions are good, too.) I'll give it 4/5.

Bratling

 

Like someone said earlier, the metamorph abilities were need to keep him hidden.

I'd give the story a 3/5. I liked his character, but he forgave the world way to easily. The parting shot he gave Malfoy redeemed it a bit.

 

I'll also agree with what others have been saying. It's passable with some spelling errors that could have been caught through beta reading and such. But it's a nice little diversion too. And for that, I don't mind.

It did feel a little short though. I can't put my finger on it, but I just like to think it could have been a little longer. A little more explanation on some things would help. Again, I can't put my finger on it.