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WIP The Trials of Asmodean by bloodylullabies - M

Discussion in 'Other Fandoms Review Board' started by Drachna, Jun 22, 2021.

  1. Drachna

    Drachna Sixth Year

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    Title: The Trials of Asmodean
    Author: bloodylullabies
    Rating: M
    Genre: Fantasy
    Status: In-Progress
    Library Category: The Alternates
    Pairings: Asmodean/Mazrim Taim
    Fandom: Wheel of Time - Robert Jordan
    Summary: The life of the man known as Jasin Natael, from the moment he died until the Last Battle. [Asmodean/Mazrim Taim]
    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13539810/1/The-Trials-of-Asmodean

    Essentially this story follows the potential life of Asmodean had he not been murdered. Rand puts him in charge of the Black Tower, alongside Taim, and intrigue, hilarity and apparently romance ensues.

    I loved it. Imo Asmodean was a wasted character in WOT, Jordan should have kept him around for a great while longer. Taim's arc was also uninspired and dull as far as I'm concerned, so it's nice to have them both as protagonists.

    The writing itself is quite good, it flows well, the dialogue feels natural, and the characters come across quite realistically as people (even if Asmodean can be a bit pathetic at times.). While the author obviously can't match Jordan's verbosity and 'flair' for world building, it probably wouldn't have worked very well if they had tried.

    Now, in regards to the romantic elements in the fic... Well, it wouldn't be my first choice of pairing, I'll say that much (not that I have any respect at all for the canon WOT pairings), but it's surprisingly well executed - there's a genuine emotional connection between the characters, and it works.

    Fight scenes are clearly not something that the author is interested in writing, so you'll have to look elsewhere if you're after an action packed narrative, but I quite like the lack of any real emphasis on violence, at least for most of the story.
     
  2. Donimo

    Donimo Auror

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    This started okay but then descended into generic trash with no hook beyond the 'romance'.