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Oneshot The Twine Bracelet by CheddarTrek - K+

Discussion in 'Romance' started by Photon, Aug 9, 2013.

  1. Photon

    Photon Order Member

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    Title: The Twine Bracelet
    Author: CheddarTrek
    Rating: K+
    Genre: Romance/Tragedy
    Status: Oneshot
    Library Category: Romance
    Pairings: Colin Creevey/OC
    Summary: Colin Creevey leaves his camera with a muggle girl but never returns to collect it.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8461800/1/The-Twine-Bracelet
     
  2. AlbusPHolmes

    AlbusPHolmes The Alchemist

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    Everything a one-shot should be - beautifully written, poignant, memorable, and the story itself made me sad. It's written in CheddarTrek's typical style - simple, yet flowing prose that is fun to read. On account of its very short length, and it being a one-shot, it gets my highest o-s rating - 4.5/5. A must read.
     
  3. Rapscallion

    Rapscallion Groundskeeper

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    The best thing in this piece was that Ched didn't make it more corny than was necessary. Perhaps, it felt a bit rushed at the end. But it also helped to cut down other complications. I rather liked the part with Dennis searching for that camera.

    4/5 from me.
     
  4. Ched

    Ched Da Trek Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Thanks dudes.

    I never really expected to see this up for review, but I gotta admit it makes me grin a bit. Makes me want to go back and fix a few of the little things in it ("too" instead of "to" I think at one point, and a few other bits that didn't flow well).
     
  5. enembee

    enembee The Nicromancer Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I really love the simplistic poignancy of this. I wish there was a bit more to the language, and there's some issue with flow in parts, but it's really impressive to get so much said with so few words. Major props.

    An easy 5/5 by Library standards in my opinion.
     
  6. Republic

    Republic The Snow Queen Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I had a sad.

    5/5


    Edit: Wait, didn't both Creevey brothers die?
     
  7. Photon

    Photon Order Member

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    According to my memory - no. And

    http://harrypotter.wikia.com/wiki/Dennis_Creevey
     
  8. esran

    esran Professor

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    I'm hesitant to give 5/5 to a story so short, but this deserves it.
     
  9. Hachi

    Hachi Death Eater

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    The feels man, the feels. Didn't know that could still happen, so 5/5.

    A short, heartrending story about what could have been. Easy to read and quite engaging too for only 500+ words.