I noticed that in quite a few of my chapters, even in some of my essay for a few of my subjects so I've cut down in it in the latter chapters. Thanks for the advice and I will make sure to correct this as soon as I have the energy. Good luck in your tests

 

Gio, be polite, I'd already handled it.

And I've made it well clear that anyone slamming a fic to hell and back just b/c it's H/G will be smacked. (refrain from commenting peanut gallery)

Aura has a point about the over adjectizing I read that and it instantly reminded me of alot of female writers(more specifically romance novels my wife reads). Not to be sexist, for some reason women often add way too many descriptives to text to make it more emotional.

 

Sorry Middy I didn't see your post b/c I was typing mine up while you were posting.

 

Yeah I do that all the time, I open up the new posts page, open all the links, and go through then one by one, lol. I usually wind up like 15 minutes behind the thread 0.o

 

Re: The Unknown Alliance by ohmygawsh - T - Undecided Pairin

Dude, Have you ever been on this sight for more than 30 seconds?, If you had you would realize the second you posted this you would be grilled.
Hell every story has been grilled in here even "the greats"

 

Re: The Unknown Alliance by ohmygawsh - T - Undecided Pairin

She was... she even had an argument with mordecai about her whole plot and i think it was indo that suggested the change in format. Btw, he's a she.

 

i apologise for taking the arguement to far, but i don't believe my review was compeltely unconstructive. I said I stopped reading because i didn't like the way a specific thing happened, and then I gave my view on why I thought it was happening in the fic.

To me thats much more contructive than someone jsut saying "update".

Gio, I didn't realise that it was going to contain Harry being wosy and going back to hogwarts and worrying about the DA despite being a High Mage thing when I started to read it, I don't do things like that.

 

"im afraid I had to giv up reading it.

Why would High Mage Harry who is so intune with magic he almost is magic go back to hogwarts? Are you doing that ebcause you think you need a filler?

DON"T IN FUTURE

A good fic only needs 10 chapters of good stuff, not 50 chapters, 10 wiht good stuff randomly scattered throughout the rest of angsty fluffy stuff."

that was his review on the 1st chapter of my so far 7 chapter story.

For possible future readers, not once do I state that Harry is a being similar to magic, nor did I out-right say he was a high mage. So far I haven't stated that Harry will be going back to Hogwarts and If he does it will be for a better reason than he suggested. Hopefully this will make a few of you understand why I pissed of with mordecai, he simply reviewed with inaccurate facts therefore not helping me in any way.

Also I apologise for my ignorance of the acceptable stories on this site but it has been rectified and there is no need to act like a stick is up your arse oh and please don't have a hissy fit about this, I'm only teasing!

 

I am sensing that fatal is infact Mordecai's alter ego . . . or fatal just really wants him to review

 

nah im a girl, hes a boy

 

Yes, I noticed that. . . and do keep in mind that this is the internet . If you played a MMO you would quickly ignore peoples claims (that's an army of how many 'Female' nightelves )

 

UPDATE@@@

Just kidding, this story is a good read. Like someone said before you describe things to much. I don't really mind the pairing since I only hate H/G if it is written terribly.