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Oneshot The Wayside Sacrament by Startide Risen - T

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by razz, Feb 19, 2006.

2.1428570747375/5, 7 votes
  1. razz

    razz Seventh Year

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    Feb 19, 2006 #1
    Title: The Wayside Sacrament
    Author: Startide Risen
    Genre: Drama
    Rating: T
    Summary: The 31st of October at Godric's Hollow. [Oneshot]
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2800199/1/


    - Seriously the best of its kind I've ever read. You wouldn't guess from the summary, but I'd say it is :shock: (besides the concept) pretty much original. Uhuh. It is just the one chapter, but oh-so-worth-it.
     
  2. Mordecai

    Mordecai Drunken Scotsman –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    Feb 19, 2006 #2
    short, to the point and completely pointless
     
  3. Aura

    Aura Seventh Year

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    Feb 19, 2006 #3
    I laughed at the math and statistics at the beginning but other than that... It's an OK one-shot.
     
  4. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Feb 20, 2006 #4
    It was boring... lol.
     
  5. Hives

    Hives Guest

    Feb 20, 2006 #5
    razz, darling, don't be worried - that's totally a guy thing. I thought it was beautiful :cry:
     
  6. razz

    razz Seventh Year

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    Feb 20, 2006 #6
    Aw, thanks hon!!! :wink:


    Could have done worse. lol. I still love it.
     
  7. tridentwatch

    tridentwatch Looked into the void

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    May 5, 2006 #7
    Um, kinda strange. Original yes, but strange...
     
  8. Necrule Paen

    Necrule Paen DLP Elite DLP Supporter

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    May 5, 2006 #8
    It is the best rendition of what happened that night that I have ever seen, but it is in the end pointless.

    One-shots are plot bunnies that never grow up, Flowers that never bloom. When you finish reading one you should wonder what happens next and yet at the same time be satisfied with what is there.

    You get neither with this one-shot. You don't wonder what happens next because as far as it indicates the plot line will follow Canon afterwards. You are not satisfied either because you don't get anything out of it, nothing is learned just an elongation of facts already known.

    It is written well but in the end it is pointless. I think it would have served better as an introduction to a story, perhaps of Harry gaining Lily's preoccupation with probability.
     
  9. Scrittore

    Scrittore Groundskeeper

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    Aug 14, 2009 #9
    It was alright for a one-shot. It was readable, and it was a good idea about how Lily couldn't escape, etc. However, as already mentioned in the past, it was pointless and boring otherwise. 2/5. Good thing this isn't in the Library.
     
  10. Kinser

    Kinser Fourth Year

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    Mar 10, 2012 #10
    Short and to the point but absolutely pointless as someone already said. I'm sorry but a one shot should at least leave somewhere where the reader is satisfied that it is what it is.

    It fails at this, and is weird to boot.

    1/5. Readable if you're in a short wait for the dentist...thats about it really. Beats the Time Magazine on the end table proclaiming Franklin Roosevelt man of the year, and even then...not by much.
     
  11. mercuryandglass

    mercuryandglass Third Year

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    Mar 29, 2012 #11
    I don't think the author bothered to check back to the third book where J. K. Rowling wrote down, practically word-for-word, the dialogue between Lily and Voldemort that night. Altough I'll give them kudos for making it 900 words long, I sort of got the feeling of it being sugarcoated. Everything seemed so... hopeful. Disgustingly hopeful. I imagined that night to be more desperate than hopeful, and most of all, there should be more fear. Also, it mentioned that Lily 'never heard Voldemort before'. Didn't it say in the fifth book that Lily faced Voldemort three times already? If I could point out so many faults...
    2/5, and I'm probably being generous.