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The works of Adultfanfiction by Adultfanfiction - NC17

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Yarrgh!, Nov 29, 2006.

3.3181817531586/5, 22 votes
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  1. Inquisition

    Inquisition Canadian Ambassador to Japan DLP Supporter

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    May 23, 2009 #41
    * Inquisition imitates Sesc.

    Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug.Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug. Tug.

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    On a more serious note, I still can't believe how well this overly-spaced out mediocre smut has rated. This is the point where I once again bring your taste into question.
     
  2. Tasoli

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    May 23, 2009 #42
    Woha, it's the first smut story I read. It is a VERY GOOD story, 4.9/5, and that is because of the author's PS in which he said the story will not be h/bella/cissy :p

    Do it elsewhere, man, there isn't much plot but the writing is very good and in smut stories it is more important than in other stories.
     
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  3. Soucy24

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    May 23, 2009 #43
    Horny much?
     
  4. Inquisition

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    May 23, 2009 #44
    Tugtugtug.
     
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  5. Stenstyren

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    May 24, 2009 #45
    You really need to read some smut if you think this is good. Slow moving shit with females on steroids and pussy guys seems to be the theme.

    3/5 just because the writing is solid.
     
  6. Sesc

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    May 24, 2009 #46
    ...

    Or, it provides at least some framework for the smut, isn't totally OOC and the only guy there is Harry. But what do I know :rolleyes:
     
  7. sincostan

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    May 25, 2009 #47
    Truth.

    Umm, everyone's too OOC. Sorry, Bellatrix and Harry are just fucking ridiculous, or is it ridiculously fucking? Or should I say "fing". I would much rather read original smut that could be much hotter. 2/5 because mechanics are alright.
     
  8. Andro

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    May 25, 2009 #48
    The writer liberally sprays reminders like 'Harry couldn't believe how filthy this woman was.' 'He couldn't believe how sexual Bellatrix was', which just kills it and shows she isn't secure in how she's presenting Bellatrix.

    And the Fleur's mansion one is even worse, featuring a Harry that's a pussy even after all the Auror's training he's gotten.
     
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  9. Tasoli

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    May 27, 2009 #49
    This. I agree, Hell, even the Minister was a pussy in that story.
     
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  10. sincostan

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    May 28, 2009 #50
    Heh, I just realized. You'd think the author name would be a dead giveaway to "delete me."

    "“Tu te fripon ‘arry . . . . . . . . You are a naughty, naughty booy . . . . . . ” She had a way to make him feel so small, Harry was embarrassed, no, he was disappointed with himself. He was better than this, he thought, he wasn’t a pervert like some dirty Slytherin, he had more self-control, a hell of a lot more since his days at Hogwarts, and he let that go."

    So this is what DLP likes... domination/embarrassment fetish. What's next, infantile regression? =P I half-expect the next chapter to have her make him suck his thumb and then tie his balls and dick with a rubber band to prevent him from wetting himself.

    Who am I kidding? When it was that strange author with the spell that made Ron's dick a extralong noodle, that was fucking sick, but actually I like this one much better than Bellatrix stepping on his balls as he begs to suck her toes.

    PS, I hope one of the other stories includes footjobs.
     
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