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Abandoned Three Wizards by poufellyanah - T

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by Palver, Feb 24, 2010.

  1. Terrai

    Terrai Second Year

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    Intriguing, Three powerful wizards with different personalities in one place, that sounds like a barrage of chaos. It's still a bit too short to rate and I would wait for 1-3 more chapters.
     
  2. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    I like it overall. The only thing is that the author of the second chapter is noticeably worse than the writer of the first. He abuses the thesaurus to an equal extent, makes his sentences as long, but falls short stylistically.

    A fairly accurate imitation of writer #1, but ungainly and long-winded.
     
  3. Hugo

    Hugo Second Year

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    Interesting idea, I like how Harry hasn't become a slimy mess at seeing Dumbledore’s face. Too early to say, but so far, I like it. Won't rate until I see more chapters; Major potential with this one, let’s hope the author doesn't fck it up.
     
  4. rachie

    rachie Squib

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    Definitely has a lot of promise, and giving Harry the upperhand was a masterstroke. Still, should be interesting how the three interact, considering how different they are. But I'll keep reading in any case:)
     
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