Title: Tipsy Time Travel Tale
Author: Yunaine
Rating: T
Genre: Humor/Adventure
DLP Category: Time Travel
Pairing: Eventually HP/LL
Chapters: 2
Words: 17,217
Updated: November 16, 2008
Published: October 14, 2008
Status: Abandoned
Summary: Harry gets dragged back in time to change the future. He has no intention of taking anything lying down again and decides to have some fun.
Link (Sorry!): http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4594972/1/Tipsy_Time_Travel_Tale

So I searched for this, but cannot find it on DLP so I therefore present it to you all for consideration. It has so far stood out among the cliché-filled time travel tales I've read previously. While it is above-average, it's definitely not a legendary story. It is a good read, however.

I reserve judgement on rating until at least one more chapter is added.


Checked by Minion, January 1, 2013

 

A link would be nice, you know, so we can read it.

 

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4594972/1/Tipsy_Time_Travel_Tale
Here's the link. I'm off to go read it. Will comment in a bit.

 

I like the humor in this, the pairing is good at its already got a decent amount of words. 4/5, but thats probably cuase I am a sucker for time travel, independent harry style.

 

...
Are you fucking kidding me?

1/5
Harry sounds like a whiny fucking teenager talking on the internet.

 

So, he sounds like you Logrus? I think I'll pass.

 

Its a comedy, Harry can be whiny, bitch, angsty, or all the above if the point of the story is to make you laugh.

Now if this was a hardcore action, then its a different matter all together.

 

I didn't even smile.

 

Its not too bad. It has sporadic installments of humour and periods where it feels like the author has tried too hard to get a laugh. The execution of the story is not perfect, there are too many scene breaks that disjoint the flow of the story. It needs more substance other than humour is required to keep the story going otherwise it'll get tired.

There are a few mistakes in spelling and word usage ie. shores/chores. It suggests that the author hasn't read over her work.

I'll tentatively rate this a 2/5 because of these problems and short comings.

 

That was a lot of fun. I ended up spending the afternoon reading all Yunaine's works at FFnet. I had a great time. I just hope "Tipsy Time Travel Tale" continues to be so much fun.
It's light entertainment.

4/5

 

Anyone else seeing two chapters worth of 18k words and not the specified 40k?

 

40k is the estimated final length. Anyway, off to read now...

 

A bit funny sometimes but nothing special. 2/5

 

It was just...meh. 2.5/5

 

This actually made me smile in a few places. A pleasant surprise. I was expecting to come back here and completely trash it. Only annoying thing is seer!Luna.

4/5.

 

I've read more than a few Harry goes back to screw ppl fics and found them boring. I'm also not a fan of Harry/Luna.

Yet I enjoyed this quite a bit. By not getting mired in recreating every last scene from the books, Yunaine has done a spiffy job with this story. Plus I find it funny.

4/5

 

A bit over the top stylistically, but it has some pretty good sequences. The potions class has to be my favourite by far! Writing is solid, and the characterisation enjoyable for the most part.

4/5

 

4/5


There are parts that are a little bit stale, but other then that it's solid and has me laughing steadily through. Hoping to see more soon.

 

There are a lot of worse reads than this and it seems to have a good update rate.

 

I found this fairly funny myself. I actually found this a day or so before OP put it in here. I was thinking of doing it, but he/she beat me to it. Oh well. I found it funny. 4/5 from me so far.