Title: Twelve Bludger Quidditch
Author: Marz1
Rating: T
Genre: Angst (Don't look at me like that), One-Shot
DLP Category: General
Pairing: None.
Status: Complete
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1456010/1/Twelve_Bludger_Quidditch
Summary: When you're burned out what makes you feel alive again?

I've had this story sitting in my favorites for a while now, don't know why it never occurred to me to throw it up in here. I haven't read most of her (I think) work, but her Naruto/FMA crossover is surprisingly good.

As for the fic itself... its labeled as angst, but I don't think most people will see it that way. Angst would be hurting yourself, forcing yourself into a dangerous situation to get some perspective on the fucking world is something else entirely.

The ending may negate that entirely, or not. I'm pretty sure it was left open to interruption for a reason.

Still an interesting one-shot.

EDIT: Does anyone know how the hell I'm supposed to edit the title? -,- It won't do it at forum level for me.

 

Meh; not great, but not terrible either. 2/5

The premise would make a great parody, though =P

Also, in the thread title, it should read "Twelve Bludger Quidditch," not "Twekve Bludger Quidditch."

 

Huh, I suppose it should shouldn't it.

Kiddies, let this be a lesson to you. Captain Morgan Private Stock is good shit.

 

It is Angsty, if that's a word, but not to the over the top level that it kills the fic. Probably a better fic if it was a humor fic or was longer it seems unfinished to me.
1-2 out of five. It was well written but didn't feel done, the characterization seemed a bit off and it just didn't amuse me as much as it could. But then I never liked depressed!Harry.

 

It was actually palatable. Not too angsty and actually realistic. I give it a 3.5/5.

It does some a trifle bit unfinished. Hopefully there will be at least an add-on somewhere down the line.

 

2/5 from me. Seems... lacking to me. Also the first person pov annoyed me since it was a short story and I didn't have time to adjust to it before the story ended.

 

I agree with the post above its missing something.

It seems that all emotion is suppressed. "It made me ridiculously happy." Instead of being stated as a fact it should have involved the reader through the use of more description.

The ending of the fic seems bland, I think its the same issue as I mentioned a lack of description. It seems that the author was going for a minimalist approach in writing the story. Yet there is a balance between minimalism and description, and I think the author did not achieve that balance.

2.5/5 => 3/5

 

I agree with Korisovra. I think that it was well written, but I also think it seems unfinished. I don't like the usage of the present first person tense, but that's just me, not the author.

The ending seems somewhat confusing. What about Remus Lupin caused him to run through the window?

I also agree with Pyromaniac. That would be a funny parody.

 

The author thrives when he's crossing two fandoms but for some reason if he decides to play in just one on its own he doesn't do as well.

Absolutely agree with that.

3/5 for me.

 

I agree with Goose on the quote she has in her post. The story's ending is lacking and needs more. In what? I'm not totally sure. It's your average story with only a few select good highlights. 3/5 from me as well.