Title: Unmitigated Smut
Author: DarkSov
Rating: NC-17
Genre: Dark
DLP Category: Restricted Section
Pairing: Well, Let's say it's Alicia/Crabbe/Goyle Rape.
Status: Complete
Summary: Just a bit of smut. Or is it? Enjoy!
Link: Linkage!

You should get a kick out of it. Jumps right in. Surprise ending!


Checked: July 24, 2012

 

Oh my. I was wondering where this was going, then when I found out I wished I hadn't. I'm scarred for life. I'm going to go wash my brain out thankyou very much. Good writing though, and from a neutral point a very good story.

 

ftw!

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The ending is a riot.

 

That was quite awesome.

 

Lol.

I did not see the ending coming at all XD

Well done matey.

 

ugh, some jerk just gave it a 1/5 and didnt even comment. Oh well. I could use some feedback on my smut writing skills, if you guys would be so kind!

 

The ending was its redeeming value. . . It is too tame for Sick and Perverse though.

 

I did not get an erection.

 

I'm terribly sorry about that.

 

Hahahahaha. That was a very good ending. 5/5 for me.

Richard.

 

It's okay, I'm gay and the only rape fantasy I have involves Gio and a pair of fuzzy pink handcuffs.

 

Who's raping whom there?

 

Had I not read this after seeing a few comments here first I probably would have not seen that coming. The utter lack of lead in was a giveaway coupled with the comments.

Be as that may,

Spoiler

It would have been better if Crabbe and Goyle were shown to have no idea that it was actually in fact Draco. Like having Draco ordering them to find and rape Alicia and then it is assumed that behind the scenes Draco swapped out Alicia for himself when the time came. This way you have a lead-in that throws off any suspicion of a surprise ending and the ending is more sick and perverse.

I think having Draco "If you guys are still up for the real thing, she is in the next room", would be a brilliant way to end this drabble.

But that may just be my arrogance showing.

What you have here only deserves
3/5

 

That's...exactly what it was. They had no idea who it was. And adding more to the ending is pretty much useless, and takes away from the shock factor.

 

Well that's one way to trick people into reading slash. 3/5 for originality.

 

lawlz.

Id give it a 5 if there were more. 4/5

 

Didn't see the end coming, I suspected it but I was thinking Harry and Ron enacting on a quidditch fantasy and raping Alicia.

Well I enjoyed it, I got partially hard...that count?

4/5

 

Nothing special, 4/5 for the end.

 

Ah, my eyes, my poor beautiful eyes . . . that ending was actually completely unexpected for me. Good job. 4/5