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Oneshot Unmitigated Smut by DarkSov - NC17

Discussion in 'Restricted Section' started by Klael, Jun 26, 2007.

  1. Klael

    Klael Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    Title: Unmitigated Smut
    Author: DarkSov
    Rating: NC-17
    Genre: Dark
    DLP Category: Restricted Section
    Pairing: Well, Let's say it's Alicia/Crabbe/Goyle Rape.
    Status: Complete
    Summary: Just a bit of smut. Or is it? Enjoy!
    Link: Linkage!

    You should get a kick out of it. Jumps right in. Surprise ending!


    Checked: July 24, 2012
     
    Last edited by a moderator: Jul 24, 2012
  2. malaga

    malaga Auror

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    Oh my. I was wondering where this was going, then when I found out I wished I hadn't. I'm scarred for life. I'm going to go wash my brain out thankyou very much. Good writing though, and from a neutral point a very good story.
     
  3. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Stasi Admin

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    Haahahahaahahhahahahahahahahahahhaha.

    This fic belongs in S&P.
     
  4. The Dark Monarch

    The Dark Monarch Backtraced

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    ftw!

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    The ending is a riot.
     
  5. Nobody

    Nobody Backtraced

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    That was quite awesome.
     
  6. Spacks

    Spacks Order Member DLP Supporter

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    Lol.

    I did not see the ending coming at all XD

    Well done matey.
     
  7. Klael

    Klael Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    ugh, some jerk just gave it a 1/5 and didnt even comment. Oh well. I could use some feedback on my smut writing skills, if you guys would be so kind!
     
  8. Giovanni

    Giovanni God of Scotch

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    The ending was its redeeming value. . . It is too tame for Sick and Perverse though.
     
  9. deathinapinkboa

    deathinapinkboa Minister of Magic

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    I did not get an erection.
     
  10. Klael

    Klael Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    I'm terribly sorry about that.
     
  11. Richard

    Richard Supreme Mugwump

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    Hahahahaha. That was a very good ending. 5/5 for me.

    Richard.
     
  12. deathinapinkboa

    deathinapinkboa Minister of Magic

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    It's okay, I'm gay and the only rape fantasy I have involves Gio and a pair of fuzzy pink handcuffs.
     
  13. malaga

    malaga Auror

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    Who's raping whom there?
     
  14. Necrule Paen

    Necrule Paen DLP Elite DLP Supporter

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    Had I not read this after seeing a few comments here first I probably would have not seen that coming. The utter lack of lead in was a giveaway coupled with the comments.

    Be as that may,

    It would have been better if Crabbe and Goyle were shown to have no idea that it was actually in fact Draco. Like having Draco ordering them to find and rape Alicia and then it is assumed that behind the scenes Draco swapped out Alicia for himself when the time came. This way you have a lead-in that throws off any suspicion of a surprise ending and the ending is more sick and perverse.

    I think having Draco "If you guys are still up for the real thing, she is in the next room", would be a brilliant way to end this drabble.

    But that may just be my arrogance showing.

    What you have here only deserves
    3/5
     
  15. Klael

    Klael Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    That's...exactly what it was. They had no idea who it was. And adding more to the ending is pretty much useless, and takes away from the shock factor.
     
  16. Lorelei of the Sea

    Lorelei of the Sea Unspeakable

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    Well that's one way to trick people into reading slash. 3/5 for originality.
     
  17. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    lawlz.

    Id give it a 5 if there were more. 4/5
     
  18. thisperson

    thisperson Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    Didn't see the end coming, I suspected it but I was thinking Harry and Ron enacting on a quidditch fantasy and raping Alicia.

    Well I enjoyed it, I got partially hard...that count?

    4/5
     
  19. MysterioX

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    Nothing special, 4/5 for the end.
     
  20. Le

    Le Fourth Year

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    Ah, my eyes, my poor beautiful eyes . . . that ending was actually completely unexpected for me. Good job. 4/5
     
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