I think the author could do a lot with this line. Harry finally has someone who notices and likes him and then finds out she's spying for Dumbledore (probably with one of those scenes where Harry overhears only part a conversation and thinks that Hermione doesn't care about him at all). It would be even better if he tells Hermione things in confidence like how he's studying horcruxes and other dark arts, but Hermione squeals to Dumbledore before she really gets to know him, and Dumbledore tells his family at an innopportune moment later. Of course, this all ends in Harry screaming "Fuck the world" and blowing shit up.

Unfortunately, I think where the author is actually going will be much less fun. Hermione was probably telling Dumbledore about the amazing magic Harry did and saying he should get credit. I expect this to become a theme as Harry does more cool shit, Hermione tries to get him to take credit for it, they develop strong feelings for each other, Harry begins to realize his self worth, blah, blah , blah. I only hope that Harry gets a backbone before everybody finds out how powerful he is, so he has the guts to tell them to fuck off. I'd also like to see Harry fuck his brother up for hitting on Hermione. Actually, I'd like to see Harry fuck his brother up for pretty much any reason, but that's the only one I can realistically hope for.

-the Jack

 

Ouch. a bit hash aren't you? of course, my theorie that Dumbledore is aware fo Harry's prowess but does everything he can to cast them into shadows is not much better. Maybe what really bothered me is that people actualy *want* Hermione to squeal over Harry to Dumbledore. Personaly, i am hoping Harry and Hermione gets a bit delusioned about england and leave the isle for thirty years or so, in order to catch random dark lords (all stronger than voldemort) or such thing, and then return just to save daniel's ass once again, and so on

 

Everything Jack said I agree with. Harry is just such a bitch ass pushover, which seems to be the only thing really dragging this fic down. Why would you care about your families attention if they have always ignored you. Anybody notice the family says nothing to him untill the meal with Dumbles it was a bit disturbing. If my family or anybody for that matter treated me like that, I would not be craving attention, I would be seeking INDEPENDANCE. Harry should become a thief to get what he needs. I like the fact he bought hella shit and used his families account to pay, that was cool, but besides that he has shown no backbone at all, why destroy shit then repair it. just leave it fucked up and blame it on Daniel or frame the new seeker, anything but repair it.

 

It is a really good story. But good lord the neglect/boy-who-was-forgotten was getting annoying as hell. He better have some good retrobution planned

 

When I reviewed the story I put forth the theory that Dumbles and or Snape must have at some point gone into Daniel's mind and seen through the charade. The only person other than Hermione to notice him seems to be Snape. It would be an interesting twist to see Snape hate Harry because Harry won't take any credit. Harry's apathy confuses Snape and causes Snape to take out his anger on him. Dumbles, I hope he knows. It would be kind of cool to see him 'hiding' Harry in plain sight.

Harry seems to be obsessing on Hermione a bit. A love potion is a possibility, but it doesn't feel right. This could be attributed to the fact that a girl, whom he finds attractive is actually asking him out. It's nice to see the author use some of the random Ravenclaws that don't get much use in fics. Plus Hermione seems to be in to him and I doubt that if Dumbles was going to pick a female to pair Harry up with in a fictional relationship, it wouldn't be Hermione who has very little in the way of experience.

The one sticking point that pushes the hard to believe button is that Harry kills the Basilisk and Daniel somehow gets credit for it. I would have preferred a different solution maybe the chamber not even being opened.

I forgot a couple of other things that kind of gnaw at me while I read it. It's Cornfoot and the rests last year on the team. I can understand wanting to set your team up for the future, but wouldn't he rather win now while he is on the team. Lets assume that the Claws haven't won the cup. The author has implied that Cornfoot has a deeper reason for hating Harry, but I dunno. It's not like Harry has stolen a girl from him or whatnot. We'll see what the author does with it.

Jim

 

The thing with the quiditch captain looking nervous that Harry might have beat that other brat could have been that DUMBledore didn't want Harry to gain popularity with his awsome seeker skills and take attention away from Daniel. Of course I'm a parinoid freak who sees conspiracies in everything so I am probably wrong.

 

I am holding out hope that Dumbledore told Hermione to ask out Harry to spy on him and that he is making sure that Daniel gets all the attention because he is the "boy who lived".

 

The idea is good, I just hope the author would get into action sometime soon. If Harry is so intelligent, why doesnt he at least check if something is put on him. Seems an awfull lot like a notice-me-not or repelling charm on Harry, maybe powered by his own magic, thats why its overdosed.
Herman wouldn't have to make the spy and control act conciously, Dumbledore could have easily put some kind of attraction charm on her (targeting Harry). It doesnt look natural in any case, with the whole concentrating problem. I just wish he would get his ass out of the gutter and do something, anything!

 

I think that the author just likes HP/HG and just made some shit up to put they together...

 

Since he has been treated like this all his life, there is no reason to suspect anything out of the norm. He has no reason to be paranoid about people plotting against him because they dont notice him

 

True, but if he is so smart than he should suspect that there is something wrong with him because of his treatment all his life.

 

I dident like the latest chapter as much as the rest of the story. It was mainly because it was only Harry/Hermione. Also Hermione asks only questions about Daniel but Harry lets her get away with it by beliving that she was just curious of how they acted in private. Then he told Hermione that he was searching for horcruxes, something that is very illegal.

I feel that Harry should have been more careful, even if he accepted her apology so should he not have mentioned the horcruxes...

 

Ok, a doze of reality for all those who were dreaming of big conspiracies and Hermione being Dumbledore's little agent spying on Harry and other shit like that:

Genre: General/Romance
Pairings: H/Hr

Does this tell you something?
Here, I'll spell it out:
Harry will not end up carving self-righteous beaver's heart out with a rusty spoon because she was working for Dumbledore all along.
He'll more likely end up marrying her, his new soul mate.

 

There is nothing wrong with conspiracies ip82 anyway story line HG cannon or not has always been mature and not a boy obsessed girl i think she just took a chance the chapter which has the train scene in granger see's harry doing the job and i think harry told her to keep it quite or something on those lines and remember she has a BRAIN so maybe she thinks harry is the BWL and went and tried to tell AD and he just told her she is wrong which is why she looked the way she did so she's dating harry and trying to find the truth, the fact everyone always ignores him maybe his loving brother just said he's a show off so everyone just ignores him and the fact he's top of the year in grades just pisses everyone off nobody likes people who are smarter than them

 

Besides the aforementioned problems with Hermione's character, (overly-inquisitive, overbearing, won't shut up) I thought this chapter was pretty decent. Nothing really happened, but this characterization of Harry is one of my favorites. His indifference and proactive personality are very attractive to read about.

I'm following this story solely for that reason.

 

I wasn't a big fan of the most recent chapter. I think the author is opening herself up to some massive plot holes. Here is why.

1. Harry doesn't know about Horcruxes but he destroyed the Gaunt ring anyway. Why do it? Why link the diary and the ring together if you don't know what a horcrux is? It just seems like the author is forcing Harry and Hermione together to work on a research project.

2. At same location, Harry saves Daniel from Voldy himself presumably outdueling the Dark Tosser. Kudos to him, but don't you think that Voldy in a duel with a sixth year ravenclaw would have done better. The only plausible explanation is the brother wand effect and that Voldemort retreated afterwards sensing Dumbles presence. Even then why not just pop back to DE Central and come back with a dozen or so DEs. Have the DEs kill the Potter brats while Voldy entertains Dumbles.

3. Voldy would have to be a fool not to know that the Potter brothers are after his horcruxes. That just seems like a really bad move on the author's part as Voldy should now increase the protections on his soul pieces.

4. Harry seems consumed by his inner apathy, but then suddenly is spilling his guts to Hermione about horcruxes and whatnot. Of course teenage boys are apt to spill their guts to tight well filled sweaters and shorter than regulation skirts. At least the author has Harry admit that Hermione is pretty in an unconventional way rather than "Ohmigod I never realized how beautiful she really is. Despite being in the same classes with her for going on seven years now."

5. The whole Super-Time turner project. That leaves a really bad taste in my mouth. I almost dread where that is heading.

6. Is his brother that much of an idiot that he lords his status over Harry, when Harry is continually saving his life. Amazing nothing Harry has done so far hasn't triggered a wizard's debt from his brother. I wonder if the Ginslut has a debt that she thinks she owes Daniel, but just can't seem to figure out what is wrong. Anyway, you would think that Daniel would know not to piss off the guy who keeps dragging his hiney out of the fire.

7. I am curious if there was a DoM battle in this story. If so there is the potential for even more plot holes.

It seems like a good story that is on the verge of really getting away from the author if she isn't careful. My recommendation is to keep reading, but not think too hard, if you do you'll start to get more and more disappointed.

Jim

 

Jim: That's the common problem when skipping years; You have to rely on some canon events, but they don't fit very well with the changes you've made in original setting. Thus, you get bunch of potential and actual plot-holes. I've yet to see the fic that manages to avoid ALL the inconsistencies that skipping Hogwarts years tends to create.

 

I agree with what you say IP, but the holes in this one look like they are beginning to become chasms. I still like the fic, but am worried that the author is digging herself in too deep for believability. By this point in the story we get that Harry is underappreciated and overlooked, I don't think we need any more examples.

Jim

 

bad stroy man i though it mite be good but......i was so freakin mad i spent like 3hours beaten the crap out of a punching bag....way to angsty for many ppl to take