Title: Victory Day (Harry Potter/Hunger Games)
Author: karatemaster101
Rating: T
Genre: Adventure/Suspense
DLP-Category: The Alternates
Chapters: 1
Words: 6,210
Summary: Tom Marvolo Riddle is reaped. The Capitol doesn't stand a chance.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10531157/1/Victory-Day

I stumbled on this oneshot crossover today, and immediately put it up for review in the library. It follows Tom Riddle if he had been born with all his powers in the Hunger Games universe, and tells his rise to power.

 

Riddle is OP, thus all suspense is lost. The prose is simplistic and tries too hard to come off as dramatic. The fic is therefore ridiculous. 1/5

 

This passes the minimum standard of not making numerous serious spelling/grammar mistakes, but that's about it.

 

This fic is kind of pointless. I suppose it's supposed to show Riddle being a mastermind and taking over the Capitol and all but the way he does it is kind of riddiculous. Also, it just feels cartoonish as fuck the way anyone so much as looks at him dies stupidly. He's just this all powerful god who is also apparently charming and intelligent although I can't actually see any of that myself. So yeah my rating would be 2/5 I suppose.

 

Utterly predictable plot, and the writing is far from fluid.

2/5, and I'm being nice.

 

The actual definition of a time waster is this 3/5

 

Magic has no place in the Hunger Games Universe and that is reason enough to stay away from it.

 

Seeing the comments, I was prepared for this to be a lot worse than it actually was. The writing is actually pretty solid. A nice opening line, for example:

And a nice bit here:

The writing has a kind of simplicity and directness that appeals to me.

However, as others have noted, making Riddle that powerful makes it completely predictable and devoid of suspense. I realize the way he won the games was supposed to be an anticlimax, but I wasn't laughing. The narrative called it stupid, and it was stupid, but not in an enjoyable way.

2/5 - Writer has chops, but this was stuck in no-man's land between a crackfic and something serious, and that killed it.

 

There are several OP!Riddle one-shots that are well received on DLP. I myself enjoy a skewed fic if the premise makes sense. And here it does.

The first part of the fic was magnificent. The middle part, with the games themselves, was okay. The ending, not very good.

3/5

 

Really?
Any links would be very appreciated