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Complete we can't control (watch me unfold) by Annerb - M

Discussion in 'Romance' started by Quiddity, Nov 9, 2018.

  1. bbodysplash

    bbodysplash Third Year

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    Really enjoyed this. I do agree that the characters feel more 25 than 35 though, so that threw me a little. Would have enjoyed more detective work from Harry's side, but I get that it's not that kind of story. I also feel like its obvious what's going on with the aurors from the get go.

    5/5
     
  2. KingRoger

    KingRoger Second Year

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    It’s so nice to see smut and plot given equal attention in a fic, rather than one being rushed to get to the other. 5/5.
     
  3. pbluekan

    pbluekan Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    There really isn’t much to fault here, which isn’t terribly surprising coming from Annerb.

    As always with this author, characterization was absolutely on point. Ginny, Harry, Ron, and Hermione all feel like perfectly natural extensions of their canon selves.

    The only major issue here was just maturity. They read like twenty year olds, but I suppose there isn’t that much of a maturity difference between the late twenties and mid thirties.
    • Technical Quality: 5/5
    • Plot: Cookie cutter romance, but done well. The mystery’s not terribly complex, but was also done well. 4/5
    • Characters: Maturity is a little off base, but 5/5
    • Totals: 5/5
     
    Last edited: Nov 20, 2018
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    quicksilver7424 Muggle

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    why
     
  5. Quiddity

    Quiddity Order Member

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    @Palindrome are there enough votes to put this in the library?