http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3980177/1/Will_He_Be_Happy

Will He Be Happy? by KafkaExMachina

Title: Will He Be Happy?
author: KafkaExMachina
Rating: T
Category: Romance, Humour
Pairing: H/Hr
Status: WIP
Summary: During Harry's sixth year at Hogwarts Dumbledore asks Snape if Harry will be happy after Voldemort is dead. He doesn't like the answer. Snape decides to clean up the mess. DH except Epi. Mostly set after Voldemort's defeat.


Reccing this for a few reasons - it's well written, the humour is dead on and the sarcasm could be used as a scalpel. And I think the characterisation is perfect.

Judge for yerselves.

 

I really dislike it when people don't make introduction threads.


Might review if I have time before school.

 

I've been following this a bit just because it's a decent read. I would classify this as mildly amusing. The sarcasm is fairly good, the characterization so-so, (Harry is a bit too whiney and self-sacrificing for my tastes) and the author actually took the time and effort to proofread while armed with a good grasp on spelling and grammar. It's nothing spectacular, though. I've read better. Still, 4/5 because it's something I haven't seen before.

 

Meh, it was OK, I guess. Good spelling/grammar, decent writing. Some points deducted for betrothal and whiny!Harry. This paragraph was a win though:

Spoiler

Hermione’s mind raced about drawing connections and inferences from every sentence in Snape’s letter. Even as she read further along she matched her personal observations of Harry’s behavior with the revealed causality, her cognitive processes working in tandem with subconscious recollections allowed her to fully masticate and ingest the repugnant vicissitudes superimposed onto Harry’s childhood. All in all, she discerned that the unfolding revelations deposited a most unpleasant taste on her metaphorical tongue. She felt trepidation stalking her like a mischievous feline. Unwilling to let her recalcitrant subconscious hinder her progress, she continued to read Snape’s communiqué.

3/5

 

Jeebus! Cruel and unusual punishment with a thesaurus.

 

Right click 07 ftw.

 

I've been reading this too, but haven't been that impressed. Hermione's been using memory charms, again, and she and Harry fucked at least once during the Tent scenes.

3.5/5, for the potential the story currently has.

 

I started reading this, but it didn't hold my interest for long and ended up skimming through the last chapters. It's a OK way to pass time but there's nothing especially good.

3/5 for being slightly interesting.

 

I dislike it simply because it seems the op only joined to post this story.

 

As the story stands, I like it. The 'obliviate obsessed Hermione' has been used before, but the plot, despite some familiar elements, is reasonably original. Vocabulary definitely scores some points, and spelling/grammar was reasonably good. Right now, I give it a 4.5/5.

Having said that, I have this inescapable feeling that this story is doomed to eventual mediocrity at best. Where's the plot going? Once Hermione runs out of Obliviate f*** ups to fix, there's no conflict whatsoever, and the fixing of Obliviates only remains interesting for so long. The limit has, I think, already been reached, and, if the story doesn't end pretty promptly after the tent obliviate is discussed (and inevitably forgiven) then the overall quality of the fic will drop. Quickly.

As is, a good fic, but I have to reserve complete judgement until I see how this thing ends.

 

It's a bonding fic. Those are generally bad by nature. That being said, Snape's sarcasm almost makes up for that. If this went under the humor genre, I might give it a better rating. Points for an original way to do a cliched plot, but this invariably means that we will have to suffer through god knows how many attempts at pathetic fan girls trying to copy this author's style. Not sure where this should go, but I'm giving it 3/5.

 

The writing in this fic is really poor. Everything that happens is telegraphed chapters in advance, and the "witty" sarcasm is extremely clunky. 2/5 at best.

 

I like the beginning as it stands. I see this as a redeeming canon!harry of his stupidity flaw.

The angst is overdone. 3/5

 

Hmm.I enjoyed the story,except for Harry being a retarded pussy.

So I gave the following review:

"Oddly satisfying.Harry better start giving back as good as he got,or I'm going to track you down and punch you in the face.

And by giving back I mean he should STOP ACTING LIKE A F*CKING P*SSY.GOD*MNIT DOES THAT P*SS ME OFF!

F*CK!"

and the author responded with:

"You will be quite happy to know that one of the underlying themes of the story is the evolution of canon-Emo McGothyPants Harry into a worthwhile human being (i.e. man with spine). Man, JKR really managed to c*ck up a good story with her last book.

Next chapter the spine emerges. Not "Smack My B**-Up" spine, but a start."

Let us hope.

4/5 so far

 

This story isn't really my cup of tea, I want my AUs to become a lot more AU, if you get my meaning. Changing only the pairing is far from being enough in my book. Marriage Contracts are also pretty boring, IMO. Writing style seemed to be fairly decent however, so I'm giving this 3/5.

 

Read more than half that's been posted.

Beyond a few amusing Snape lines, the rest is godawfuly boring.

Initially it had some interest, there was a degree of suspense of what will happen to Harry.

That quickly gets solved and now we're on to relationship development, which I have to note began with Hermione gnawing on the back of Harry's neck.

Yes, an amazing starting point. /sarcasm

I'd read this if it was Snape and Potter interaction surrounded by a different premise.

As it stands, 2/5 for content.