Is English a second or third language for you? 'Cause I mean... wow. Dumbledore: while I don't think he's being overly bashed, he's definitely not in character. In fact most of the characters are mirror images of each other as far as characterization and dialog go. Politics: not much to be shown, correct. Lord Levels: This is Harry Potter, not Dragonball Z. Dumbledore isn't a Lord. Harry isn't a Lord. Harry being OP'd: Eh... elemental magic (under a different name) that trumps everyone! *cringe* While I'm a fan of powerful Harry, I'd at least like it to conform to the magic of the HP universe. Edit: (forgot about the rating) 1= Trash. save yourself the trouble and watch paint dry. You'll be more entertained. 2= Needs a lot of work 3= Average story. Meh. 4= Good story. Needs polish. 5= Outstanding story. Of course, these are my rating levels. Others use their own.