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WIP Wind Shear by Chilord - M

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Peter North, Jun 3, 2017.

  1. Pure Infinity

    Pure Infinity High Inquisitor

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    Every interaction Harry has with anyone annoys me. His constant preaching to Dumbledore - who should easily be able to deliver a verbal smackdown on Harry, the fact that he can easily convince Bellatrix with his 'I'm 14 and this is deep' style bullshit, and the fact that Moody, Charlus, Orion, and Lucius are constantly riding Harry's dick.

    Not to mention the latest chapter, where Harry 'busybody' Potter decides that it's a good idea to insert himself into the lives of his parents and their friends on their first day at school, and attempt to make them "better people". Hey, here's an idea - you know your dad is going to grow up eventually, why don't you step aside and let him do it on his own? The fact that they don't actually act like children, and decide to ignore his bullshit entirely is also annoying.

    If the author spent less time jerking Harry off, and more time attempting to write decent character interactions, this story could conceivably be a 3-4/5. Instead, I've spent this entire story waiting for a character who I usually root for to get put in his goddamn place. 2/5 seems about right.
     
  2. Plotless

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    For all its flaws, this fic sure has an active review section.
     
  3. The Pro

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    That's the thing with fanfiction. Horrible stories always, always receive incredible amounts of attention. Horrible stories festering with rancid, cliched waste always become popular almost overnight. The few gems hidden on fanfiction sites are nowhere near as popular. Damn if it isn't unfair to those genuinely skilled authors out there.
     
  4. Download

    Download Supreme Mugwump DLP Supporter

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    Got up to chapter 6 before dropping it.

    The author has a few good ideas and the writing is reasonably competent (though they could do with a beta), but the author has butchered characterisations and motivations in a way that just rubs me the wrong way.

    Take Bella walking away from the Death Eaters. The concept itself is interesting but instead of having it be a progression over several events that teach her the path is folly she just does a complete 180 in one go. The House of Black's characterisation is also just wrong.

    Harry himself is also just irritating and I finally dropped the story during his first duel with Voldemort that just made me cringe the whole way through. The whole political angle is weak as well.

    I really like the concept of everyone around a person being erased from history, even if it was a lie constructed by Harry. I'm actually really tempted to write a story based on the concept.

    I really want to rate this higher but all it gets is a 2.5/5 rounded down from me.
     
  5. Pathtoreading

    Pathtoreading Squib

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    Could you provide a link to that?

    Also, I like that this fic doesn't have a lot of angst about the time travel - and the first couple of action scenes are great!
    I'm waiting to see the end before giving a rating.
     
  6. Snapdragon

    Snapdragon Seventh Year

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  7. Hush

    Hush Seventh Year

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    I just can't get over how he's monetised his writing on patreon. Until he reaches a pledge of $700, he won't continue/revive one of his stories. He's currently at $163 per chapter... he shits out 3,000 words he gets another payment.

    I sincerely hope no one of any writing quality moves to do the same.
     
  8. oakes

    oakes Auror DLP Supporter

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    Maybe we should start doing the same thing lol, I really could use more drinking money.
     
  9. The Pro

    The Pro Seventh Year

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    Wait, people actually pay for this shit? I'll admit that the author is reasonably competent, but it's nothing spectacular. Why would I waste good money on something like this tripe? :confused:

    Mind = blown
     
  10. Anarchy

    Anarchy Fourth Champion DLP Supporter

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    Man, I wish I could make money by writing generic, poorly plotted HP fanfiction.
     
  11. Download

    Download Supreme Mugwump DLP Supporter

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    I'm tempted to go and rate them 1/5 just for asking for money.
     
  12. Sey

    Sey Unspeakable DLP Supporter

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    Anarchy oakes

    Ransom the WBA. Buy in access for HP&BWL starting at $50 a head.
     
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  13. The Pro

    The Pro Seventh Year

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    Eh. Let's just ignore it. Patreon isn't exactly a new thing (dunno how the hell I didn't know about it). I get where you're coming from though. It rankles that fanfiction writers are getting paid... for writing fanfiction.
     
  14. Jeram

    Jeram Elder of Zion DLP Supporter

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    It's okay... some stupid mistakes, like using "pants" like an American and a few typos, and some real shaky characterization. I agree about the "lords" business, but I see some potential to be an average sort of guilty pleasure.
     
  15. Anarchy

    Anarchy Fourth Champion DLP Supporter

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    Supposedly there's only 19 chapters to the story. So, I guess the author did learn something from Delende Est. The 20th chapter is where it really going downhill in that story, so I guess the author of this story figured that this story can't go downhill in the 20th chapter if there is no 20th chapter.

    Logic.

    Or perhaps it's simply that there's no hill to go down since we started at the bottom of it.

    FWIW I am actually caught up on this story with the posted chapters on FFN. My opinion hasn't changed - I figured that it's a new story that a lot of people are going to talk about for some reason, so I'd better know what's in it.
     
  16. Deftex

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    Better than most fanfics, but most are terrible anyways. 2/5 if only because I took the time to read it.
     
  17. SeekingSerenity

    SeekingSerenity Third Year

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    Wouldn't he get in legal trouble for monetizing fanfiction? I have seen dozens upon dozens of "authors" milk away the plebs in the ff community, yet not a single one has gotten a strike or at least some sort of indicator that his monetization backfired. Real odd. Or just maybe people don't care.
     
  18. syed

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    With the sheer about of transformation magic he uses, I got to wonder if he is an animagus. I bet for storm chaser it will be very cool
     
  19. Jeram

    Jeram Elder of Zion DLP Supporter

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    I expect that won't happen, but it's also possible it'll literally be a storm chaser animagus thing like the thunderbird.
     
  20. stormfury

    stormfury Unspeakable

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    I like the plot (I read the whole thing as it was being updated on his forum), but it suffers from the same problem every Chilord fic has - every character speaks in the same voice with the same banter, all the time.

    It's like there's one actor playing every role, but he really like his Robert Downey Jr. impression, and he's doing a one man show of every character as RDJ.
     
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