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Abandoned Yin and Yang by IP82 - M

Discussion in 'Dark Arts' started by ip82, Aug 5, 2006.

  1. sirius009

    sirius009 Minister of Magic

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    Never thought of that, but it makes sense, if someone really wanted to get to the chamber all they would have to do is break down the wall..
     
  2. Brooklynight

    Brooklynight Seventh Year

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    Great story IP, its definetly and original take on the betrayed Harry theme. Personally I didn't like the idea of Mengele being Grindewald, he certainly was evil wnought to be considered dark but he was content to preform his experiments on children and inmates and from what I know he never had ambitions of power, he wanted to be great but he wanted to be remembered as a great resercher and doctor not as an all powerful general. Besides that I liked his experiment/ritual that was performed on Harry.

    Great story overall, I still prefere Potter's Resistance but still good.

    4.5/5
     
  3. Palver

    Palver High Inquisitor

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    I liked IHateGoblins!Harry. Definetely refreshing. While Breaking Ties still my favorite, this story is best in the so-called "Horcrux Hunt".

    5/5
     
  4. Archer

    Archer Fourth Year DLP Supporter

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    Mhmm... one of the best Post-HBP stories I've read.

    5/5
     
  5. Ragon

    Ragon Dark Lord

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    I dont think I can describe anything that hasnt been describe. So I am going to stick with.

    I love it. Brillant.
     
  6. jbern

    jbern Alba Mater

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    I think everyone will agree that IP needs to do more writing. In fairness, he has allowed me to help him flush out the plot holes in this piece, but it is well executed and definitely a good way to spend some time.

    I guarantee you will enjoy this one!

    Jim
     
  7. CGB

    CGB Auror

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    Great story IP. Excellent beginning. Now I'm anxiously waiting for the next chapter. You're really sadistic you know. Why do you do this to me...?
    Anyway 5/5 stars
    It's a pity you can't register this story for the summer contest.
     
  8. DarthBill

    DarthBill The Chosen One

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    Marvelous. I hope to see more soon. I especially liked the line: "Being smart rocks!"
     
  9. Void Sorcerer

    Void Sorcerer Groundskeeper

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    Great story chap. Really enjoyed it and can't wait for the next chapter to come out. So hurry already!
     
  10. Prophet of the Waves

    Prophet of the Waves First Year

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  11. Randeemy

    Randeemy Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    This is AMAZING. The cliches work and fit with the story. Unlike in most fics where people put them in to give Harry something to moan about. In fact, this could throw into doubt, the idea that using cliches are bad.
     
  12. Feoffic

    Feoffic Alchemist DLP Supporter

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    Kickass and badass all rolled into one.

    Like a Motley Crue concert, except without the fat blob known as Vince.
     
  13. Zield

    Zield Fourth Year

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    Very nice job with this, I really liked your idea with the chamber not being this impenetrable room to all but a parseltongue. Though i do have a question about the books taken from Dumbledore's stash, will those be the subjects focused on? I ask this because you mentioned alchemy and you have a lot of original ideas in all your stories and alchemy does get mentioned in stories occasionally but it's generally just a passing comment, and i wondered whether you would be one of the first to actually delve into the subject itself.

    Thanks, and I can't wait till the next installment.
     
  14. MrINBN

    MrINBN Unspeakable

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    5/5 and definitely recommended. I do hope you update this soon.

    ...I just figured out who's leaving the messages. I'll not tell though.
     
  15. Lord Apophis

    Lord Apophis Professor

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    Its a very nice start. One thing that annoyed me was Harry remaining in the Headmaster Office while reading the books instead of just taking anything of
    use and escaping before reading them...
     
  16. Kiklo

    Kiklo Seventh Year

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    Harry stupefying Ginerva was sweet. Great start to the story, I got hooked right away. But I still can't figure out who is writing all these letters...Nonetheless great job with Harry's reaction to everything, I was able to picture myself recking the office in absolute anger. Just one thing, Why didn't Harry just take all his money out of the trust fund, that way the order won't be able to steal his money more.
     
    Last edited: Aug 12, 2006
  17. physwap

    physwap Squib

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    a minor question...u mentioned that hermione was involved in stealing from harry's vault. So couldnt she or ron tell the order what harry was planning to do abt thr horcruxes?

    Swap
     
  18. Palver

    Palver High Inquisitor

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    I don't think that Harry gives a damn about it right now.
     
  19. Olaf74

    Olaf74 Squib

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    Will you continue it soon?
     
  20. ChuckDaTruck

    ChuckDaTruck Overlord

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    But how did this person know about the ritual chamber, and its location?

    Unless it was Harry? God I REALLY hope its not somebody that cliche and overdone. Please tell us its not.

    Can you just confirm that its NOT Harry (from the future)?