Title: Rise of the Wizards
Author: Tuefel1987
Rating: T
Genre: Adventure/Suspense
DLP Category: Independent Harry
Pairing: Harry/Daphne (but not much)
Status: Work in Progress
Summary: For Centuries they have hidden in the shadows, passing into legend and myth, watching ... waiting ... till one day, The Chosen One's eyes were opened ... Thus began the Rise of the Wizards AU after fifth year, featuring a Darkish and manipulative Harry
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6254783/1/Rise_of_the_Wizards

Independent Harry done in the right way. It doesn't contains all the excessive bashing and other things from normal independent harry cliches.

I rate it 5/5. (But that's my opinion)

(If you don't like the first chapter, try to grit your teeth and read from second)

PS: I swear I searched the forum but hadn't found any link to this story. So, here it is.

 

I don't think he used 2002-2003 anywhere in the story. So, no need to worry

 

No. Just no.

To be clear, this is boring, derivative crap. And I don't feel generous today

1/5

 

The kid writing it is probably young enough that he didn't know if electricity was invented yet in the 90s and wanted to avoid anachronisms

 

I have just started to read this. I actually took the authors advice and tried to read his/her connected one-shot first.
That was a mistake, the writing was terrible. I must have read the worlds longest sentance. I can only hope that the author has improved remarkably before starting this.

---------- Post automerged at 11:16 PM ---------- Previous post was at 10:46 PM ----------

okay I have made it 6 paragraphs in and am just about ready to give up on this. Let's go through a blow by blow account of what was wrong:

well appointed? - it's his ancestral home, who would have appointed it to him. Even if there are other family members in this fic, appointed is just a poor word choice. Nobody appoints there son a bedroom; you give them one.

I read the phrase former friend and gave a quiet sigh. I'm sensing pointless character bashing in the near future.

I honestly spent a second of confusion before realising that he was describing a second location that the confrontation had happened in.

At least one good thing has come from this. I have discovered I might be psychic.

Dumbledore bashing. Children cooking up revolutionary goverment policy.

Just no!

Six paragraphs in; my hopes are not high.

 

This story is an example of why the HP/DG community is one of the worst.

 

well-appointed:
adj (well appointed when postpositive)
well equipped or furnished; properly supplied


Sorry, I couldn't not point that out.

 

Actually it should be well-appointed, as he used the adjective before the noun (study). At the moment the sentence is describing a study appointed to him well.

Though hands up, I actually forgot the adjective until your post. I am willing to withdraw the complaint and replace it with a thousand other new ones. My suggestion to anyone reading this. Give up now and check out Uncle Stojill's new fic. I sense awesome and win coming from the work

 

While technically correct, I can't shake the feeling that the author meant to use the phrase, "well apportioned."

 

I've been reading this fic since, the beginning, and its pretty good.
3.5/5 in my opinion for not so excessive bashing, and character development. I wish there was some more romance, but this fic is much better than other Daphne/Harry pairings out there.

 

I remember now why we had the Intro sub-forum.

Fic is poorly done and boring; I got through the first two chapters and realized I had better things to do.

1/5

 

I agree with you for most of it. The author had Salazar info, but I wasn't lured into reading it as nothing is being done.
This fic is horribly cliched, and not much action

 

Got pushed to the front of the 1st page of ff.net through update, so I read it.

The last chapter I started out with, and the fact that Harry was nicknamed "Pup/Cub/Bambi" made me click x.

 

Bambi thing was only prank of Remus, there was no such nickname in the past. Reaction of Harry to Cub heavily implied that Remus used it only in jest for the first time since childhood. And Harry never heard Sirius use Pup because Sirius never used it after his escape from Azkaban.

I like relationships in this story, they seem to me like they are realistically portrayed with no soulmates or truelove crap. IMO, story seems well-written without any glaring errors (but English is not my first language, so no guarantees). There is no outrageous bashing and Harry acts more mature than in canon, which is always good. He also makes mistakes and he is definitely no Super!Harry.

 

I like a few chapters of this story but i basically skimmed it all. I don't like how he makes the magic from the founder time so primitive I understand lost magic but the levitation spell come on thats just ridiculous. Some of this story is alright so 2/5.

 

1/5. Normally I would give a story like this 2 stars, just for half decent spelling and grammar, but this story's unoriginality is just insulting.

 

It is painfully unoriginal, but I could just about skim it until the latest chapter (if simply to avoid exam revision.) HP/DG is becoming one of the worst pairings because of stories like this. Also, there's the Slytherin teaching Harry cliche (he may be doing it through the diary, but I believe that it is still a breach of Potter Law,) which is the main thing which made me unable to continue.
2/5