Title: Through Dead Eyes
Author: Seraph Orion Black
Rating: M for language
Genre: Mystery/Drama
DLP Category: The Alternate's
Pairing:
Status:
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4500250/1/Through_Dead_Eyes

Summary: Period: from 1981 to 2042 (Second war and beyond)
Lead character: OC - Adrian Jonathan Potter, Harold James Potter

Alternate Universe, Runs partly parallel to canon.

Harry Potter is not the first-born child of James and Lily. Why was Adrian Potter, the older-by-four years brother of Harry, executed for murder after the final war? What secrets had Harry hid about his eldest brother and why? Why is there so much mystery behind his life and death?

Harry's parents survive Oct. 31, 1981 and have some more kids, Harry's grandparents died on that day.


Please fill in the blanks. - Tinn.

 

http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=101

 

I stopped reading after the second chapter. It was't really bad but
it couldn't hold my interest. They all just tell stories and it is boring.

2/5

 

I kept reading and this story is terrible.

The main character is Harry's OC brother who is popular and powerful and smart as Tom Riddle but gets blah blah manipulated out of the picture by Dumbledore because "he thinks a talented brother would be too much pressure for Harry to live up to". Imagine the worst cliches of Twin Who Lived... except it's not even about Harry, it's about some lame OC. Harry is a minor figure at best.

Featuring great dialogue where characters act realistically and sentences do not run on, like: "Lily who had been watching the interaction between the great Albus Dumbledore and her son and mildly peeved at him for not showing proper respect to her headmaster decided to intervene." After a few chapters I only kept reading out of hopes the OC would die horribly, possibly eaten by rabid dogs conjured by Dumbledore.

FAILY FAIL FAIL. 1/5.

 

I read some here and there. Dirk already pointed out the problems so no need to rehash the bad.

I just felt the need to remark that your initials are SOB. Sunnuvabitch!

 

Its pretty hard to pull off an OC that no one wants to see.