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Old 03-30-2006, 08:26 PM   #1
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Gabriel by Shikatanai - T

Title: Gabriel
Author: Shikatanai
Rating: T
Genre: Drama/Humor
Pairing: None
Status: Work in Progress
Chapters: 33
Words: 135,128
Updated: June 3, 2012
Published: December 9, 2005
Summary:AU: At 5, an abused Harry is taken in by a powerful family. Taking the name Gabriel, he grows up into something very different. How will Hogwarts react? Soldier!Harry, Neutral!Harry, implied child abuse.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2695781/1/


Took a look at it,loved it.My favorite part is that Harry's adoptive uncle kills the Dursleys for abusing him.Harry's a person who will kick anybody's butt who disrespect's his family,and who ever challenges his honor and integrity.


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Old 03-30-2006, 09:13 PM   #2
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Yeah, I've been reading this awhile now. I forgot to post it here. It's been pretty good so far.
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Old 03-30-2006, 09:50 PM   #3
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It's good, if not a little odd, but still pretty good..
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Old 03-31-2006, 01:23 AM   #4
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I've tried reading this one before, but it pissed me off too much. Harry is such a fucking robot, he has no personality whatsoever - I'm not usually picky on characterisation, but here it's just .. arg.

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Old 03-31-2006, 10:01 AM   #5
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Quite good, but I suspect updates will be slow from now on as it says:

"I have destroyed all the major nerves in both of my arms from all my typing, and the doctor said that I need to quit all non-essential computer related activities."

That's alot of typing!
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Old 03-31-2006, 09:30 PM   #6
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0_0 Whoa....and I thought I was bad...
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Old 03-31-2006, 11:41 PM   #7
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wow how the hell do u hurt your nerves by typing? Honestly though the story has picked up. I like how the Mal Thaes(?) are sort of a crime family, it reminds me of "The Godfather" i love how he doesn't know every thing either. Not knowing about the chamber or about Salazar was oddly refreshing..
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Old 08-27-2006, 01:05 AM   #8
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This is one of my all-time favorites. I love the Mal Theas; they make me want to speak Hindi.

I feel similarly about my family: friends come and go--your family members are really the only ones you can trust.

I have to say that the fact that Gabriel (as Harry is known in this fic) became a Lt-General at age 9 or something like that is a bit out of range and the names and geneology (despite the family tree on her yahoo group) can get rather confusing.

But all in all, I love it.
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Old 09-03-2006, 07:42 PM   #9
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I read this story a while ago it's a great idea it seems like one of the few original independent Harry ideas
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Old 09-11-2006, 10:53 PM   #10
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I think the best idea that this author incorporated into this story, and one of the most original ideas I hae seen in a long time is the idea of the Traditionalist families. Just the entire mindframe of it is very inspiring and if that story becomes huge in the fandom, I think we could see another trend spreading around very fast.
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Old 09-13-2006, 02:51 PM   #11
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While I recognize it was good, I still hated it.

I can't stand fics where Harry becomes someone other than Harry Potter, and ends up looking different.

And Harry is just too...cold. I dunno, be he seems to be devoid of all emotions and humanly urges besides 'Protect Honor'.

Which is another thing I hate. Honorable!Harry is annoying.
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Old 09-13-2006, 09:02 PM   #12
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It is boring as hell but well written..
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Old 10-26-2006, 08:51 PM   #13
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have to say i love this fic, and it just got updated which is an even bigger bonus (the update is massive too) I normally really dislike this sort of fiction but there is something about this one thats i am drawn to, plus the fact it is extremely well written and the author has a great writing style.
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Old 10-28-2006, 12:50 PM   #14
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I half liked this fic, the thing that really brought the quality down was the fact that Harry kept using Hindu God names, like, "Oh Shiva, blah blah blah." Fuck man, Hindus don't do that shit, we say, "Oh fucking God." just like everybody else. The guy/girl that wrote this story was a complete moron trying to act like s/he knows any other culture than his/her own hick ass town.

"An interesting question that a lot of people ask me after reading "Gabriel" is what ethnicity I am. Now, I find this quite flattering, as I've had people of Indian background asking if I shared their culture, which I interpret as me doing a good job. Actually, I'm homegrown American. My grandfather is from Algeria, and a lot of the French influence in my story is from him, but other than that everything has been researched. I have a deep fascination with other cultures (one of the reasons why I'm currently looking into an endorsement in anthropology) so I do try and keep everything as true-to-life as I can."

Fuuuck that, this bitch don't know anything about shit. Pisses me off, dipshit bastard.
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After a long pause the fic is updated again.

I still have it in my bookmarks and now reread the last three chapters to get back into the story. I really wonder why I didn't delete it yet.

If there is a real plot it is hidden well ... behind all the elements needed to introduce the Mal Thea Family. Rereading the last chapters in one go showed me how randomly chosen some parts seem to be. Certain things are thrown together as if the author got another idea, and the next, and so on ... and never thought about a consistent plotline.

And the last two chapters - both new - are weird. Weird concerning their construction - they jump back and forward - and their content, as the key event of these chapters isn't described at all. Just the surrounding is used to introduce a new character. New? Well - some people might now him. It seems to be a kind of Haku - here as a physically disabled genius with brain instead of ninjitsu.

At the end of the last chapter the plot suddenly moves forward. Suddenly and unexpected some certain plotelements comes into view and it becomes clear that this is no longer neutral!Harry.

At the moment I rate it 3/5. It is not the worst fic out there but not good enough for the library.
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Old 06-29-2007, 07:10 PM   #16
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I really liked this i havent read the new chapter but the rest of this fic is really good i think. Ill rate it when i finish those two chapters.
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Necroed. At first the story and now this thread.

Yes she did. After almost three years, the author added two chapters this month. But is anybody out there still remembering what it actually was about?

Oh, yeah, now I remember. It was about Harry taken in by some French-Indian warlord called Mal Thea, who is now visiting Hogwarts as an exchange student.

The chapters are fillers with Harry's Mal Thea Mum visiting Snape to offer a translation of a parseltongue book and Neville planning something with a bottle of polyjuice potion. And it ends with a cliffhanger. Expect something unsurprising happening soon... in three years or so.

It's still 3/5
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I remember reading this long ago. The first chapter caught my attention. I thought it was fairly well-written and introduced the characters and setting accurately. But then he kept introducing the characters and the setting and the plot never really came. I think the author could've introduced those aspects of culture that are significant throughout the story quite successfully without bombarding us with lots of info and no story.

Harry is not really Harry, so that's one star gone. There is hardly any plot-line, that's another two stars gone. The author felt like showing us his/her fascination with foreign cultures and did so by flooding the fic with info and OCs; another star gone.

Gets to keep one star because it's well-written at least.

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Astonishingly, this got updated again, just under a year after the last update. I was shocked as well.

The chapter itself is...short, for one thing - not quite 2000 words, and most of that is Dennis Creevey being a retard. Quite disappointing, really.
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Oh - the nostalgic feeling. The first time I posted in this thread was almost exactly four years ago.
And almost one year ago I predicted the author wouldn't update so soon.

Gladly I was wrong.

Considering that by now the whole story is a disappointment, the new chapter wasn't that disappointing. The first paragraphs actually made me laugh.
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